Darling Fair

Darling fair, with bright and golden hair,

If you were mortal, I would never know.

A perfect, fallen angel you must be.

 

So, you heav’nly cherub; please stay true.

For though you often tell me you are mine,

I tend to forget it a lot of the time.

Reviews

[emipoemi]

If here reviews could be a single word,
My single word for this would then be: WOW!

Well done!!
(For sound purposes, I'd suggest to move "often" to before "tell me" rather than leave it after.....and I was going to say something about the last line being a bit wonky in regards to the musicality, but the way the musicality flows, I can say it kind of works.... veering from the set rhythm to end in style and the bang that is the line!)

[Ethan]

Ah yes, you're right, good idea. And yeah, I was trying to go for something with a couple amphibrachs on the last line. Does it end the line abruptly?

[emipoemi]

not at all. It's reads perfectly. You just need to remember to breathe in between "it" and "a" to really pack the punch of that charm.

[Ethan]

Oh okay, thank you very much :)

[emipoemi]

always with pleasure.

[Vasilees Sybissyl]

Goodness, where do you come up with this stuff? It's awesome! The way you described your darling and compared her to a fallen angel, well, that' new for me. To sum it up, one word - wow!

Love,
Vasilees.

[Ethan]

Thanks :))

[Decidious wind]

Your poems for some reason make me feel nostalgic for some reason. Its as if i'm reaching out to my past life or something. It seems as if the narrator is deeply infatuated with this "darling fair"while she isn't. She makes him feel as if she isn't his sometimes which must be painful! So we side with the narrator. There is a lot of pathos in the poem yet you didn't paint it so explicitly. Well done! Truly... amazing!

[Ethan]

Thank you :)

[John Alexander McFadyen]

An interesting read Ethan. Not so sure it is as romantic as some see it. More tongue in cheek? As always you structure your pieces well.

[Najam Us Saher]

Simply amazing...I liked it.

[Gee]

Tis sweet Ethan, the sort of sweet that wins a lady's heart.
Good job

[Ethan]

Well, thank you

[Sofia]

It's so beautifully penned..I liked it a lot.. it's totally amazing..thnx for sharing :)

[Ethan]

Thank you-

[Sofia]

Pleasure! :)

[Raven Moonchild]

Ethan, this is amazing!!! :D If you have a girlfriend, read this to her!! If not, save it for the special lady you meet one day. Or special dude, however you choose. :)

[Ethan]

Haha what if she had brown hair

[Raven Moonchild]

Then change it to dark hair. lol

[Ethan]

It's throw off the meter😂 Regardless, thanks

[Raven Moonchild]

lol Sorry. Well, look up different shades of brown and see which one works best. :)

[Ana Papaya]

really sweet poem, nice work Ethan.
like a bit of old world romance and a touch of magic

[Ethan]

Thanks ana :)

[Ana Papaya]

no problem

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

Aahhhh perfect you won me any angel poem I love but yours is special

[Ethan]

Thank you, I like angels too :)