Senses

Close your eyes

And think of me

stand still

And listen to my voice

Close your lips

And taste my kiss

Use your hands

And feel my skin

Use your arms

And embrace me

Now use you tongue

And tell me what you Think, Hear, Taste, and feel.

 

Reviews

[Stacey Watts]

So many things expressed here. The senses all used to create a passionate beautiful piece. One that flows very sweetly. Great piece.

[Eagle Cruagh]

You really want your poem reviewed ?
OK---stand by.
"Close your eyes and think of me", "stand still"
Tall, gaunt girl, dark , hungry eyes, wistful looking
I am not close to you, You keep moving away.
Middle aged, late thirties.
"Close your lips. Taste my kiss"
Sweet, hint of lilac, sensuous sweet lips.
"Take your hands, feel my skin"
I touch your cheek. You have been crying !
Your skin is hot, you may not feel well.
"Now use your tongue and tell me what you taste,
hear, think and feel ".

From my tongue to your mind:
I think you are a shy, intelligent, gifted writer, a sweet girl.
Taste ? woman
Hear ? Bells ring, a chorus of voice raised in song , a symphony.
Feel ? Hot, excited, possessive .
Think ? That I am being tested.

In a few words this little poem brings us an album of brilliant
pictures, pictures of all sorts of men in various stages of thought
and emotion. A beautiful picture book, created by a gifted
, sensitive and very intelligent lady.

My rating is 100 %

----- Eagle Cruagh

[Tate Morgan]

excellant again

[TraceyPotgieter]

So much conveyed in so few words. I really enjoyed it, nice work the way you integrated all the senses so smoothly.

[Jibey]

Nice idea... so often we fail to say what we are experiencing - and words add to the pleasure. Clearly the tongue has more uses than one...lol