Broken Rain

Broken Rain

A Poem by ewest1220
"

My tears and my blood will fill me again...

"

Broken Rain 

By: Ethan West


I am not like you

A battered bridge for others use

I am not like me

The man who fell down on his knees

A broken heart tied up with thread

Left scars of silence in it's tread

And even now my thought does cease

As tired mind attempts to ease

My sorrows right here ending my pain

Like a rusted rain jacket to fend off the rain

But rust as rust will, will crumble and fall

And drenched in my tears I'll desperately crawl

Away from the blood that broken heart leaks

Away from the pain that broken mind seeks

My pain has a way of being around

To beat me to death as I fall to the ground

The rain and the blood from broken heart patched

Like nothing I've seen, my spirit has crashed

It leaves me like this, away from my health

What was in my heart is now in my self

I lifted my head and she was above

Her face bore the grace of a beautiful dove

She beat me to death on that beautiful plain

My tears and my blood serenading the rain

My tears and my blood will fill me again

My tears and my blood will fill me again

© 2012 ewest1220


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wow i'm awestruck by the pure emotion and expression that this piece holds. the battle that the narrator goes through is just pure sorrow and pain. and the last lines just seem to pull the piece together perfectly. I love the line "My tears and my blood serenading the rain" it's both beautiful and heartbreaking.
Bravo:)

Posted 7 Years Ago


4 of 4 people found this review constructive.

ewest1220

7 Years Ago

Thanks! I'm thrilled you like it!



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Wow

This is amazing
The growth out and into pain
The fight
The refusal of pain
The strength through weakness

Amazing

Posted 2 Months Ago


ewest1220

2 Months Ago

Thank you! I'm so glad you liked it!
I felt the struggle in your thoughts. You made the reader believe every words. The language used. Amazing. Thank you my friend for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

Posted 4 Months Ago


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Oh my.. where to begin?

The imagery is immaculate, personifications, similes, and metaphors loud and clear.

I cannot pick what verse touched me the most, but if I had to choose, I think, I would definitely pick one simile: Like a rusted rain jacket to fend off the rain -- that smell and metallic taste of rust, and the drenching wetness of rain did it for me.

Wow.. :D

Posted 4 Years Ago


Wow, I felt something, It was like you were reading it to me because the emotion was just, so pure. Very good jog, amazing job.

Posted 4 Years Ago


What a wonderful piece. Very artistic!

Posted 5 Years Ago


You are incredible at engaging the reader and really making us experience that pain, as if we were you. It's very intense, but at the same time enchanting and beautiful. Amazing piece of work here.

Posted 6 Years Ago


This is great.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

ewest1220

6 Years Ago

Thanks!
this is really great I loved it.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

ewest1220

6 Years Ago

Thanks!
'A broken heart tied up with thread; - so fragile.

Your poem travels word for word like a time bomb ready to explode, emotions shot to pieces as if under attack. I'm not sure what to say next, i think there's hope to be had but i wonder at the scars.. perhaps they'll be proof that you've come through. Better and gentler times to come. We all pray for that. Your post is a beautiful sadness.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

ewest1220

6 Years Ago

Eh I wonder about the scars at times as well. However scars will fade given enough time. Either wa.. read more

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Added on July 17, 2012
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Tags: Poem, Dark, Reflective, Love

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ewest1220
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Columbia Falls, MT



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I have been writing for as long as I can remember. I have been featured in about 4 books, have won several contests for my work and currently have a paperback edition of my works. (Titled "A Winter Wa.. more..

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