Past Tense

Past Tense

By: Ethan West

Listen now to my bleated plea

Abandon all with little to give

Tarry not and follow me

Follow me for I want to live

To live and to fall

With each step that I take

To be in life's hall

While the spirits awake

To never give in

To blackening rain

Of torturous sin

And tremendous pain

To make my mistakes

And see my heart rising

To see how earth quakes

At my bitter despising

For now I am lost

And lost now within

All of life's cost

Like a knife on my skin

I leap from the blade

For you followed me here

To this place in the shade

To a room I hold dear

And with subtle silence

I leave you this rhyme

To leave in past tense

And become lost to time

Author's Note

Any feedback is greatly appreciated. Thank you!

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

Remind me of a Lenard Cohen song. The words open the door to thoughts. Places and regret lead us to many places. Some good and some bad.
"For now I am lost
And lost now within
All of life's cost
Like a knife on my skin"
I like the way you ended the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[ewest1220]

Wow thanks! I always highly value your input Coyote! Thanks again for reading I'm thrilled you enjoyed my work!

[EileenMarie]

Great write! I really liked this :)

[ewest1220]

Thanks! I'm glad you liked it! :)

[The dark story]

this is such a splendid poem .........your strong words makes your strong thoughts stronger than ever....the theme,the rhyme,the rhythm.........is just so great...overall....it is just awesome

[ewest1220]

Thanks! I'm glad you liked it!

[Serenity Faith]

This piece has a strong impact. I can't help but notice that most of your writes are either life, love, or death. You have strong emotions, and it shows. That's a good thing with your writing ^_~

[ewest1220]

Sweet! ^_^ I'm glad you liked it!

[Serenity Faith]

anytime ^_^

[Justin Flume]

Fine piece of poetry here E. :P

Loved it! xD

N/A

[ewest1220]

lol thanks my friend!

[Foxemerald]

I feel songs coursing through your work- indeed being carried upon this work on a light song through nature's equivalence to thoughtful sentiment is a relishing exercise, which I take full advantage of. The voice within the song blows powerfully, so that inspiration takes me through the love affair of the most precise, perfect, refreshing words tailored to subject. Pure enrichment.

[ewest1220]

Wow! Once again thank you so much for the stunning review! I'm thrilled you enjoyed my work and thank you so much for reading!

[J. F. Charleston]

Very well put! That was amazing.

[ewest1220]

Thanks! Always a pleasure to hear from ya!

[Baby Ricochet]

WOW! That was great. I'm glad you're my friend

[ewest1220]

Same here! Thanks for reading!

[Jordan A. Wilson]

last stanza, most profound.

[ewest1220]

Thanks!

[Lizbeth]

I love this poem, it is fast flowing and the last stanza is especially good:
I am not sure which lines I like more:
"And with subtle silence
I leave you this rhyme" or perhaps:
"For now I am lost
And lost now within"
Thanks for sharing
Lizbeth

[ewest1220]

Interesting! I'll take a look at it and see what it looks like. Thank you so much for reading!

[T. Logan]

This has a sort of beat to it. I like this one.

[ewest1220]

Thanks! Glad you liked it!