Chapter 5: Another Damsel

Chapter 5: Another Damsel

A Chapter by ewest1220
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"The rear horsemen were in hot pursuit, of what though? He could not fathom."

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Chapter 5: Another Damsel


Issak had not slept well that night. Due to the Amas he had had to take the long way around the clearing. He figured that it would be at least two more days before he got to the city on foot.


But by horse it would take him less than half the time, and the road was a were mile away. Issak's tired mind slowly came to a decision. He would catch the Amas' patrols off-guard and steal one of their horses. And from there he would travel along the road and reach Shenok Duhl before sundown.


***


On the road in question was the reason the Amas had gathered in the clearing in the first place. There was a small carriage rolling it's way down the road. It's passenger was none other than the lady Elenor Saigen. Daughter to the King of Shenok Duhl.


She was a beautiful woman. Long black hair that did not cover up, but enhanced her beautiful face. She was dressed in a plain white dress and bore little jewelry, for she detested them. Her deep blue eyes stared out the window into the woods, which were dimply lit by a beautiful sunrise.


There were two bodyguards sitting beside her. Both women, one carried two knifes, the other a bow. Both bore the look of former beauty that had beaten down by years and years of death and suffering. Only to be replaced by cold stares and vicious posture.


“Please lady Elenor,” said the woman with the bow. “Pull you head away from the window.”


“Why would I do that Tao?” Barked the woman with the knifes.


“Because Merade,” Tao said levelly. “Something large is coming down the road behind us and I don't want to look suspicious.”


Elenor withdrew her head from the window immediately. Merade nodded her head in agreement. A cold silence filled the carriage as Issak drew nearer and nearer to the road.


But it was not Issak who would reach them first. Behind them, but still within eyesight of the carriage a large cloud of dust was rising into the air. And as the two forces grew closer and closer Tao grew more and more tense.


***


Issak had arrived at a cliff about ten feet above the road. He placed his head on the ground, the rumble of nearby horses met his ear. To him it sounded like an entire escort. A carriage with many riders nearby.


He raised his head from the earth. Pondering what he had heard. It could mean one of two things. Either there was a small carriage with a rear guard to protect itself from the large army behind it. Or the rear riders were in pursuit.


If the latter was true then he would more than he may want to backtrack in order to ambush the riders behind the carriage Their horses were likely much quicker and he would need to make a very swift escape.


By now the sun had reached it's high point, allowing him to look down the path. Two dust clouds marked the forthcoming victims. Judging by the horizontal length of the read cloud he decided the later of his options was true. The rear horsemen were in hot pursuit, of what though? He could not fathom.


He leaned lazily against a large grey rock as he waited for them to arrive. They would be here in minutes.



© 2012 ewest1220


Author's Note

ewest1220
Alright this was copied straight from a written page so there may be typos. Please let me know where I can expand, what questions are unanswered or, really, any input you have on this book this has been a long time in the making. I have the entire book written I just need to translate it to text. Thank you guys so much for reading and for your support you guys are awesome!

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Got a question, why did Merade talk when Tao was clearly addressing Lady Elenor? It doesn't make a whole lot of sense to me. Maybe if you put in that Elenor was about to say something, but was interrupted by Tao, the following dialogue wouldn't look so out of place. These short chapters are a very fast read, which is nice. However, it wouldn't hurt to have some more details and backgrounds on the characters you want us to pay attention to. Please expand more and don't rush so much to get these chapters out. Since its your story, I don't think it's going to run away anytime soon.

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ewest1220

7 Years Ago

Very true very true. It's funny when you convert writing to text how short the stories get. This o.. read more
FantasyLover24601

7 Years Ago

You're welcome!



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I think you have a good chapter here, and I enjoyed it. There was thing I felt I needed to bring to your attention, it may be that I am not reading the sentence right, or that it needs editing.

were mile away - sorry did not get this line.

Sarah.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

ewest1220

7 Years Ago

Ah thanks for pointing that out. Will fix it soon...
Sarah Hitchcock

7 Years Ago

No worries.
Hmn! Nice

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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

ewest1220

7 Years Ago

Thanks!
A very vivid picture that you have created for me... Fabulous....

emilythestrange xxx

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ewest1220

7 Years Ago

Awesome I'm glad the picture was painted well! Thank you so much for reading I'm glad you liked it!
emilythestrange

7 Years Ago

x
ask yerself more questions about wut you see in this story

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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

ewest1220

7 Years Ago

Will do! Thanks for the input my friend!
gombeggar

7 Years Ago

no prob
very enjoyable. keep it up

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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

ewest1220

7 Years Ago

Thanks! Will do!
Got a question, why did Merade talk when Tao was clearly addressing Lady Elenor? It doesn't make a whole lot of sense to me. Maybe if you put in that Elenor was about to say something, but was interrupted by Tao, the following dialogue wouldn't look so out of place. These short chapters are a very fast read, which is nice. However, it wouldn't hurt to have some more details and backgrounds on the characters you want us to pay attention to. Please expand more and don't rush so much to get these chapters out. Since its your story, I don't think it's going to run away anytime soon.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

ewest1220

7 Years Ago

Very true very true. It's funny when you convert writing to text how short the stories get. This o.. read more
FantasyLover24601

7 Years Ago

You're welcome!
This chapter is pretty good.
100/100

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

ewest1220

7 Years Ago

Thanks!
great chapter here. The way Lady Saigen and hervtwo bodyguards were described made me picture the scene very vividly. Is Isaak going to do anything to the traveling royalty? Off to the next chapter

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ewest1220

7 Years Ago

I'm glad the description here is a little better. I'm finding out that my description of settings i.. read more
Nice

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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

ewest1220

7 Years Ago

Thanks!
oooh another great ending..... next chapter hee! hee!

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ewest1220

7 Years Ago

lol I'm glad you're enjoying the read!

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