Chapter 13: No Rest for the Weary

Chapter 13: No Rest for the Weary

A Chapter by ewest1220
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“That will remove the need for caution at the very least. Until we again, sweet Elenor...”

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Chapter 13: No Rest for the Weary


The King awoke to the sound of voices outside his door. He lifted himself from his bed sleepily and opened the door silently. What he saw was a strange sight indeed.


There was Issak holding his sleeping daughter in his arms. He was talking to her two bodyguards in a hushed tone.


“I tried to sooth her as best I could, even so,” Issak muttered his eyes finding the floor. “She cried herself to sleep before I could make it here.”


“What happened?” Tao asked cooly.


“I know not,” Issak replied cautiously. “I awoke to find her this way.”


The kings eyebrow lifted in suspicion.


“My situation is such that I would never be able to have such a love...” He remembered Issak's words vividly, did he break his daughters heart tonight? Perhaps...


“Do you think that there will be any long term effect?” Merade said softly, interrupting the King's thoughts.


“What doesn't kill you only strengthens your resolve to live,” Issak said softly. “Before she fell asleep she muttered something about an angel.”


“An angel?” Tao said. “That's preposterous what would an angel want in this castle.”


“I would assume it was after me,” Issak said coldly.


“You don't know that,” Merade almost shouted. “You always attack yourself and unless you are going to tell us about the sin that haunts you I will not hear another word of your useless self-pity!”


“Pity,” Issak said distantly. “I wasn't asleep the entire time they were in my room. However if she, if I, caused this much pain I will leave in the morning.”


“Until you have found the motive of this apparition that haunts you I will not permit you to leave.” the King said sternly as he appeared from his bedroom door.


“You don't understand,” Issak began.


“What I understand is that you have once again saved my daughter and I will not leave you with that debt unpaid!” The King said over Issak's complaint.


Issak sighed slowly. “I leave her in your care,” he said as he headed Elenor over to Tao and turned to leave. His tall form slowly disappearing into the darkness of the hall.


“Now that that's settled,” the King yawned. “I must return to my quarters. Merade, follow Issak and insure that he does not leave this castle tonight.”


Merade nodded and ran down the hall after Issak. Her feet making no sound in the still air of the hallway.


“Do you really believe this man?” Tao said after Merade had vanished.


“I know not,” the King said sadly. “I will ask Elenor about it in the morning. But, for now, she needs rest. As do you Tao.”


Tao sighed and carried Elenor off to her room. If Issak had hurt Elenor tonight she would kill him without hesitation. He was just a man after all. Silence covered by a feeling of discontent and sorrow filled the hall. All the while Anri stood in the shadows, lost in contemplation at the man they called Issak.


“So you saw me?” Anri thought pleasantly. “That will remove the need for caution at the very least. Until we again, sweet Elenor...”



© 2012 ewest1220


Author's Note

ewest1220
Another short chapter. This one was more crucial to the character development especially the bodyguards. What do you think?

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Noticed some fragmented sentences that need fixing:
-“I leave her in your care,” he said as he headed Elenor over to Tao and turned to leave. His tall form slowly disappearing..." would read better as “I leave her in your care,” he said as he headed Elenor over to Tao and turned to leave, his tall form slowly disappearing..."

-"Merade nodded and ran down the hall after Issak. Her feet making no sound..." should be "Merade nodded and ran down the hall after Issak, her feet making no sound..."

I read your note about this chapter being more crucial about the character development of the bodyguards, but other than them being clueless about what is going on, I don't feel like I know them any better as characters. I'm not saying that you should throw all of the character development into just one chapter, but I just don't get the sense that these bodyguards have grown and changed in the slightest bit. But, I could just be really anal-retentive about the character development today and perhaps you mean to have the character development grow with the overall story. Also, where is Elizabeth? You said that she was an important character, but she seems to have been written out of the story. I hope that's not the case!

Posted 7 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

ewest1220

7 Years Ago

Sounds like I need to add a bit more detail :-) as far as Elizabeth goes she turns up when everythin.. read more
FantasyLover24601

7 Years Ago

You're welcome!



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Good

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

ewest1220

7 Years Ago

Thanks!
Loving the story, great work so far mate. I do hope we have romance blooming between Isaac and Elenor ... I am hopeless. ;)

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

ewest1220

7 Years Ago

lol I think you'll like where the story goes actually :)
I like the way this chapter is set out it makes it easier to read and its shorter. I am reading out of sequence but somehow I have been able to get the gist which is good writing.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

ewest1220

7 Years Ago

Great! I'm really glad you're able to follow along with it I must be doing something right lol than.. read more
This is very interesting...I cannot get a fix on this Isaak character...Sometimes he is creepy sometimes he is normal....Anri is still a very cool character and now that he sees something is up its pretty interesting....I also can't get a fix on Elanor....This is a great thing because characters that are easily predictable are boring and easy to come by...Yours are very deep and filled with layers...It also makes for a better story with more twists and turns if you wanted to add them at a notice....At the same time, your writing is also very clean and trimmed very propper like one of those show dogs...Extremely excellent work...Keep it up ewest

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

ewest1220

7 Years Ago

Wow! Thank you so much for another very detailed review my friend I'm really glad you're enjoying m.. read more
Matty Bosox

7 Years Ago

Its my pleasure ewest
This is great. I literally could not stop reading from Chapter seven to now my attentions been on this book. I'm so bummed I have to wait for more now. I'm loving it. Keep it coming.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

ewest1220

7 Years Ago

Will do! I'm really glad you liked it thank you so much for reading!
Good, but you forgot to put "meet" in your last sentence. :)

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

ewest1220

7 Years Ago

Whoops! XP Thanks for pointing that out!
I really love reading your book ^_^
Excellent job!
100/100

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

ewest1220

7 Years Ago

Thanks!
Noticed some fragmented sentences that need fixing:
-“I leave her in your care,” he said as he headed Elenor over to Tao and turned to leave. His tall form slowly disappearing..." would read better as “I leave her in your care,” he said as he headed Elenor over to Tao and turned to leave, his tall form slowly disappearing..."

-"Merade nodded and ran down the hall after Issak. Her feet making no sound..." should be "Merade nodded and ran down the hall after Issak, her feet making no sound..."

I read your note about this chapter being more crucial about the character development of the bodyguards, but other than them being clueless about what is going on, I don't feel like I know them any better as characters. I'm not saying that you should throw all of the character development into just one chapter, but I just don't get the sense that these bodyguards have grown and changed in the slightest bit. But, I could just be really anal-retentive about the character development today and perhaps you mean to have the character development grow with the overall story. Also, where is Elizabeth? You said that she was an important character, but she seems to have been written out of the story. I hope that's not the case!

Posted 7 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

ewest1220

7 Years Ago

Sounds like I need to add a bit more detail :-) as far as Elizabeth goes she turns up when everythin.. read more
FantasyLover24601

7 Years Ago

You're welcome!
It seems shorter than the other ones, which I kind of like. It sort of breaks tension from the other longer ones. I like how the guards seem oblivious to the danger.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

ewest1220

7 Years Ago

Interesting. This one will probably be more or less untouched aside from adding some small details s.. read more

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