The Write Tool

The Write Tool

A Poem by exotic flotsam

A poem about technology versus simplicity.




To space we flew

Not one country, but two

The race was one

We sped past the sun


When time came to take a note

Writing tools wrote by rote

Ours was new, long and thin

Theirs was old, to their chagrin


To note making we did take

We bragged our pen was no fake

Our genius pen cost 4 mil

Their trick created a chill


When ours broke down

Deeply did we frown

Said we “Ours cost 4 mill”

Said they “Ours is a pencil”




© 2013 exotic flotsam

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This made me think of what lengths people would go to impress…to feel powerful even if it’s not necessary…not really technology and simplicity but I hope it’s not too disappointing that a veered from your intended meaning

Posted 10 Years Ago

lol only in america. the "4mill and pencil" rhyme is really good,

Posted 10 Years Ago

1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

exotic flotsam

10 Years Ago

Thank you for reading my work. I thought I'd bring back the cold war. I'm glad you like this tension.. read more

10 Years Ago

i just thought it was really funny, i was going to write a big review pointing out most of the thin.. read more
Something like when persons write using pens is because they are sure of what they are writing, and when persons use pencils they can go back and erase or other people or time could disappear and erase what they wrote.

Posted 10 Years Ago

1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

exotic flotsam

10 Years Ago

I've lost track of my review responses, so I'll send you either a repeat, or a late. Thank you for r.. read more

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3 Reviews
Added on August 22, 2013
Last Updated on August 22, 2013
Tags: space race, russians, america, rockets, astronauts, simple


exotic flotsam
exotic flotsam

Bellevue, WA

I'm an adrenaline junkie former lawyer stay at home Dad, infatuated with elevated writing. more..