This Time Around

Trying to get love right

Dear love of my life,

This time around

we thought certainly we'd be bound,

but, again our stars did not align,

though we both kept alert for any negative sign

of forces wanting to tear us apart.

But, when fate is determined to win,

it gleefully counts up all our sins,

writes them down and laughs,

as it watches you contemplate your coming loss,

as just like many times in the past,

we come together, but do not last.

How many chances are we given,

what do we need to do to appease the Gods,

because I would do anything to be with you-

not for just a year or two;

What I want is all my time spent loving you,

I long to be loving you for all eternity      

Reviews

[barleygirl]

Your poem feels as if written by a person who looks around & all he/she sees are people in relationships that seemingly last forever (that would be me). Yet, this narrator has known only fits & starts, relegated to longing for someone else's rendition of how love should go. It's hard to embrace love when it isn't meant to last forever. Why can't we just savor however love comes? *sigh!* fondly, Margie

[VALORMORE DE PLUME]

The winds blow,
we toss like leaves.
Oh to be the wind,
not the scattered.

[Barbara Walker]

I knew you'd understand!

[Marvin Thomas Cox-Flynn..]

True love is for eternity, light years beyond the grave, and to seek that kind of love is a most noble and romantic aspiration ...

[Barbara Walker]

Thank you so much!! We really were so great together...sigh

[Philip Muls]

You should probably not test love all the time, just let it be what it is. I guess that is the message that I see in your poem. Well done.

[Barbara Walker]

Oh it seemed to be testing us...again and again and again! Thank you for taking the time to read and comment!

[Coyote Poetry]

I enjoyed the poem. To appease God. Is it possible?
"How many chances are we given,
what do we need to do to appease the Gods,"
I like the hope and strong emotion in the words. Thank you my friend for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Einstein Noodle]

oh my! reads like a recipe for disaster entertained by one .. been there .. once is far more than enough ..for me the strength of this is its conversational tone .. and a universal story .. how many times does it take??? ouch ouch ouch!! .. its a bumpy jagged road :)
E.

[Barbara Walker]

In this case, the underlying state of mind was-are all these terrible, seemingly insurmountable roadblocks tests on the strength of that love when it's clear that both people want the retionship...would comment more but difficult on this phone lol

[Einstein Noodle]

:) i see !! are roadblocks a sign to "do not go" or .. a test of strength and commitment? .. tough stuff no matter .. for me .. i quote Dale Carnegie .. " If it doesn't work .. stop doing it " :)
E.

[Barbara Walker]

:):):):):)