" ~ my talking mirror ~ "

" ~ my talking mirror ~ "

A Poem by goldifada
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just try it when you are alone and everyone is against you!! take a mirror and go to a calm place and start talking and let out all your worries and you will see the difference!! belive me!

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maybe it's madness
but it's the only way in my case
let them call me crazy
cause i don't really care
even without this there blablabala
is already everywhere
but talking with her makes me feel
so safe so strong so good
she is nothing and no one
but she is my everything
when the world become so hard and horror
when everyone are so stronger
when you are the only one in trouble
come and talk to my talking mirror

© 2015 goldifada


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goldifada
little try!!!

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Hi Goldifada this read very easily - I feel that this line "yes itt's her my talking mirror" - was a bit TV kids show for this fine write -
you reveal the secret in the final line anyway which marries the poem and title excellently
if you really want to keep the line I mentioned above in then perhaps you could have something like this;
" ~ my talking mirror ~ " - the tilde marks allow for a pause which is fine for effect and for the flow.
this poem is a revelation, thanks for sharing

HTH

anto

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

goldifada

5 Years Ago

yep why not ANTO thank's a lot :)



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Hi Goldifada this read very easily - I feel that this line "yes itt's her my talking mirror" - was a bit TV kids show for this fine write -
you reveal the secret in the final line anyway which marries the poem and title excellently
if you really want to keep the line I mentioned above in then perhaps you could have something like this;
" ~ my talking mirror ~ " - the tilde marks allow for a pause which is fine for effect and for the flow.
this poem is a revelation, thanks for sharing

HTH

anto

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

goldifada

5 Years Ago

yep why not ANTO thank's a lot :)
even without this there blablabala
is already everywhere
but talking with her makes me feel
so safe so strong so good

I especially enjoyed these particular lines. . . nice job!

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

goldifada

6 Years Ago

thank's a lot for your reviews it just gives me the want to write more :)
audrie

6 Years Ago

you're welcome!
very nice, being close to oneself is what gives confidence and strength to decide and deal with external pressure. Keep writing

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

thank's elisa !!! it's so nice from you:)

Posted 7 Years Ago


7 Years Ago

You're welcome, keep on writing, have fun goldifada! :)
A powerful piece though, I see here a woman with self confidence, a woman who dares, and a great woman! :) nice try and welcome to WritersCafe, it's good to have you!

P.s. Send you a mail back.
All my best wishes,

- Elisa

Posted 7 Years Ago



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goldifada

relizane, relizane, Algeria



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