in my mind

in my mind

A Poem by goldifada
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from the heart!

"
in such a cold dark night
i'm out staring at the starlight
calling you name so quiet
hearing the melody of the rain
and trying to forget all the pain
by thinking of all the sweet memories
that he and i got for two years
it felt good it sounds nice and so great
that's why there is no regret
even of all the pain
but i'm so glad to put the end sgin

© 2013 goldifada


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Very nice description of lost love and i like that there is no bitterness. There are a few slips but they are easily sorted. Should be 'your name' and he and I is better as 'you and I'. Also not sure what final word should be.
Don't worry. I can see your idea shining through!
Regards,
Alan


Posted 2 Years Ago


It's best not to stay in a dysfunctional relationship and keep the good memories rather than contaminate the relationship and add bad memories of the relationship. . .very nice!

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

goldifada

6 Years Ago

as you have said "contaminate the relationship " will have no goods it just will make us feel more p.. read more
audrie

6 Years Ago

couldn't agree with you more. . . : >
This was interesting work, just amend two spelling errors

calling you name so quiet
It should be,

Calling, "your"

Also last line

End sgin....

I think you mean again?

Hope you don't mind, your very good poet and you write from heart.



Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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goldifada
goldifada

relizane, relizane, Algeria



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