4am

This is one of the first poems I have ever written that has little to do with me. I thought it'd be a challenge to write about something you don't fully understand.

It’s 4am.

When it’s 4am, the past sinks in.

The fights that ended with the taste

Of cheap wine and tears, and the endless

Hours of violent sobbing due to the knowledge

That it’s all over. Not to mention the seconds each

Spent listening to the same songs, over and over, and

The meals you re-cook to remind you of that one evening

Where he told you he loved you, and you said it back. Or the

Profanity that left your mouth as you drive in the car he helped

You fix; merely because you miss the way he used to swear when

Everyone cut him off. When it’s 4am, everything sinks in much further

Than your bones; it sinks into your soul so far you get dragged along with it.

 

When 4 am says “You can’t do this anymore,” you believe it. 

Author's Note

Any reviews would be greatly appreciated!

Reviews

[Gobinder Singh Dhindsa]

Nice.. Keep it up.. Do u read mine 2 "ANGUISH" If possible then gives ur review..tc

[ChemicalMadness]

Youve done well here, in content and in form. It's raw emotion, with a casual eye for the ear of your reader...just enough paint to outline a picture. I'd encourage you to think about not only the words you choose, but also what you want to leave your reader with. You've begun quite well....

CM

[Faith]

Thank you both for the compliment and creative criticism!

[Timothy]

This is completely irrelevant, but this reminded me of a song by Our Lady Peace called, 4AM.

[Steve]

Very cool! I like this .

[Faith]

Thank you!

[Steve]

For me, this

[Steve]

Stuff occurs at 3 am.

[Faith]

Fair enough! Perhaps we just all have different timings of thought.

[Robert Strzalko]

Hi Faith. I think most of us have experienced something like this at one time in our lives. I think you capture the emotion of it very well. It's a lonely, lonely feeling deep in the night...sometimes that feeling never goes away and you have to live with it for the rest of your life.

[Faith]

Firstly, thank you for a lovely review! Secondly, I completely agree. A lonely feeling in the middle of the night can sometime feel like one of the worst.

[Michael G. Smith]

You have definitely captured that desperate feeling one has after losing a deep love. It's funny cause as reading this I am listening tot the song Outta Love Again by Blue Murder.

[Faith]

Thank you, I'm glad you think so! And how coincidental!

[Steven Seaman]

id also like it if you would read my story that I'm writing im hoping to get it finished by the 10 of april :)

[Faith]

I'll get on it!

[Steven Seaman]

exceptional writing I loved the feelings and emotion you put in your poems but something I noticed is that in some of your poems your either consistent or not and in my sense I would stay the same all the way through a poem

[Faith]

Thank you for both the compliment and creative criticism! I definitely see where you're coming from.

[E.A.B]

This is me and my ex's relationship in a nutshell. At some point you actually don't do it ever again! Thank God for endings! I enjoyed this! Happy Writing! =)

[Faith]

Thank you! I'm thrilled you could relate to this in some way.

[AJ Fau]

"I thought it'd be a challenge to write about something you don't fully understand." I really like that quote and think it mixes well with your poem's theme. Your poem was refreshing and well constructed 0:)

[Faith]

Thank you so much! Glad you liked that quote, too.