Pandora's Box

Pandora's Box

A Poem by Tallulah
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About people and how they change tehmselves for others.

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You wish for a name

For a personality

For an idenity

For an answer to the question;

Of who you really are...

 

 

You wanted it to be given to you

Because you're afraid

That  your choice

Won't be widely accepted

You wanted your identity

HAnded to you

In a wrapped box

Tied with a bow

For you to unwrap

And discover who you are

 

How's that working for you?

Falling instep beside them

They think they can tell you

Who you are

They change your name

Your favorite things

Even how you walk...

You know this isn't who you are

 

 

But everyone accepts this

And now they accept you...

You don't want to sacrifice your popularity

But you don't want to pretend anymore...

 

 

But you wanted a name

An identity

A personality

All given to you

And you were handed

A wrapped box

Topped with a bow,

An oppurtunity inside.

 

But you found

That a box can't contain

A name or identity

And who you are

Can't be determined

By anyone but yourself

And that sometimes

Something given to you

Isn't worth taking

But rather, its better

Left aside, in a corner

Unopened

Like Pandora's Box.

 

 

 

© 2009 Tallulah


Author's Note

Tallulah
Not my best but i've had the worst writer's block and posting what I write helps me get over that. So here it is.

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Okay I really love the idea of this poem. And I think you wrote it very nicely.
The only critique I have is that at the end you write "Like Pandora's Box."
I almost think it would be better if you didn't put that in - if you elluded to Pandora's Box, but let us draw the conclusions. Plus, it is the title of the poem. To finish the last line off with the title of the poem is, well, rather...predictable.
So I would either consider changing the title so as to make the poem less predictable, or changing the ending. Poems are somehow always better if they MAKE the reader think - if you don't just hand them the information.
Beside that, I believe your first and third verse are the best part of the poem. The first was especially well crafted, and the third was written in a such way that it spoke to the reader (me). Very neat. I like your style. :)
Okay I hope that was not too critical, because I did really enjoy your poem!

Posted 10 Years Ago


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Okay I really love the idea of this poem. And I think you wrote it very nicely.
The only critique I have is that at the end you write "Like Pandora's Box."
I almost think it would be better if you didn't put that in - if you elluded to Pandora's Box, but let us draw the conclusions. Plus, it is the title of the poem. To finish the last line off with the title of the poem is, well, rather...predictable.
So I would either consider changing the title so as to make the poem less predictable, or changing the ending. Poems are somehow always better if they MAKE the reader think - if you don't just hand them the information.
Beside that, I believe your first and third verse are the best part of the poem. The first was especially well crafted, and the third was written in a such way that it spoke to the reader (me). Very neat. I like your style. :)
Okay I hope that was not too critical, because I did really enjoy your poem!

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

i LOVE it!!!!!!! it is ssssoooo true! this relates to my life and it really has a great meaning! i can't imagine what your best is like!

Posted 10 Years Ago



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Hi! My name's Tallulah! I'm a 16 year old girl. There's not much to say about me. I like to write, draw, read and run. I love music and am trying to learn to play the guitar....failing at it though. I.. more..

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