ONE DAY

Little by little I see it all flow

My anger, my pain and my glow

My smile has gone far away

Torment and anguish in foreplay

When did I lose my heart and soul

Breathlessly wondering who stole.....


My prayers for death are unheard

Wonder whose prayers are answerd

My life passes by at a fast pace

But one day I will find my space

A day when I will finally have it all

Happiness and laughter over all.....

Reviews

[Maumil Mehraj]

When the time is right, you sure will....I loved the rhythm and the flow of the poem
Thanks for sharing!
Maumil

[Cerise]

Thank you for review..:)

[Neon]

Of course, you'll find a comfort in someone's arms. someday. one day.. umm, but before you go hid under someone's arm, would you mind if I take a chance to breathe you? (Kidding)
Your words speak through your heart that's bordered by the darkness. Seemed someone has hurt you allot. Don't say that It was me! Lol I don't hurt you, but I wonder, do I? (Devily smile).
Cheer up ;)

[Cerise]

Hahahahahah....u and ur dialogues thnx u for review...:)

[Neon]

My pleasure ;)
Glad even you could smile. Ah - I was craving to see that smile... sounds creepy? Ah - I know, creepy sounds always creepy. Lol

[Cerise]

Haahhaha defi creepy ..:p

[Lavender Soya]

The rhythm is good, I've enjoyed it from start to finish. I was able to relate. Nice work! :-)

[Cerise]

Thank you ...:)

[Cara]

great poem, thank you for sharing

[Cerise]

Thank you for reading...:)

[Sindu]

Everyone goes through those dark times, I guess, where you forget how to smile :/
Very neatly penned the despair and hope to still fight it through :)

[Cerise]

Thank you for review...:)

[Alex Boyd]

Wow, is the word that comes to mind... I mean the swiftness and fluent flow of this poem fits the wanting to be happy again.... I love the mood of this poem....

[Cerise]

Thank you for review...:)

[TPK Stories]

A sad tragic piece. . .loved the ending...

[Cerise]

Thank you for review...:)

[micky]

Wow this is really relatable to me specially latly, i love this piece it has a wonderful flow,its simple, honest and clear

[Cerise]

Thank you for review...:)

[Jennie Baron]

This has a musical rhythm, not to mention a profound message about waiting and longing. Well done, Cerise!

[Cerise]

Thank you for review...:)

[Leslie Philibert]

Well put together with good couplets...

[Cerise]

Thank you for review...:)