intermission : experimental

intermission : experimental

A Poem by Doll

Your eyes so clear and piercing and hurting
on the inside torn apart raw feel me
cut and spare the chemical reactions

in your head morphine running
slow get up get down give in
hands steal breath hurry along

fast comfort lies
beyond the truth
inside yourself

now
so
lost

© 2009 Doll


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"fast comfort lies
beyond the truth
inside yourself"

it's true you tell yourself stuff to make you feel better, but the truth is you lost yourself drowning in them.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

this is very interesting, because you just don't know where one sentence begins and the last ends. the complete omission of punctuation certainly adds to the experimental feel it's apparently supposed to display. a very nice and interesting read.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

i can feel this....been there.........very nice.....

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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