revolver

revolver

A Poem by Doll


Tired.
Too much happened to mention.
right here; right now. Too much; too late
and now it's back to where you started.

Circle; round round we go.

Skies fly by go down get up, leaving life behind;
rewind, create; rise & fall.
Rise and shine, give it a try.
maybe. next time.

Circle; round round we go.

Do the wrong thing; watch yourself break. Pity.
Walk the line; between the sentiments.
You are done. Lay down; wake up.
Repeat & See.

Circle; round round we go.

Disappear and crawl back out.
Dive into the red sun followed by black and blue and grey;
you are alone here.
Feel it; swallow.

Circle; round round we go.

Guilty your mind and empty your eyes;
sleep overcome. Creeping just beyond consciousness
& stealing your sanity.
Look ahead; tell me what you see.

Circle; round round we go.

© 2010 Doll


Author's Note

Doll
thank you so much for taking time to read this. And a very special thank you to everyone who also takes the time to leave a comment. <3

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Powerful, and 'forcing' piece. I thought that the sudden periods and semicolons in here didn't make it choppy, just more demanding. And I like the 'Circle; round round we go.' repitition. I agree with wolfshrew, I see song potential in this. Great piece :)

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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Powerful, and 'forcing' piece. I thought that the sudden periods and semicolons in here didn't make it choppy, just more demanding. And I like the 'Circle; round round we go.' repitition. I agree with wolfshrew, I see song potential in this. Great piece :)

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

this is song material, i feel.

Posted 10 Years Ago



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