Pain

Pain

A Poem by Arik
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Haiku

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The knives in my skin
Hurt less than those in my heart
Pain is not equal

© 2012 Arik


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I think by comparing the emotional pain to the physical pain of knives in the skin you created a whole new level of skill in the poem. I also like the way you set the emotional pain on a higher level than the physical pain. It makes it more relatable to the reader. Nowadays, people are not being physically harmed, but the emotional scarring that they deal with is worse than any physical pain. Nicely done.

Posted 11 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.




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wow, i really like this, the thought of comparing the two sets them really a part. well done.

Posted 11 Years Ago


This is beautiful. Simple and too the point. No extra fluff; you said what needed to be said and stopped. Love it!

Posted 11 Years Ago


short but deep ...good job

Posted 11 Years Ago


Intriguing comparison, and very true at that. I like the simplicity of this one. (:

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I think by comparing the emotional pain to the physical pain of knives in the skin you created a whole new level of skill in the poem. I also like the way you set the emotional pain on a higher level than the physical pain. It makes it more relatable to the reader. Nowadays, people are not being physically harmed, but the emotional scarring that they deal with is worse than any physical pain. Nicely done.

Posted 11 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Emotional pain is always harder to bare then the physical pain. Beautifully written.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Arik
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Apple Valley, CA



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