A Liar's Fate

A Liar's Fate

A Poem by fiery-san

A brief pause
An eternity of silence
Brief thoughts of doubt
The echoing sounds of shattering
Trust
Respect
They fall to the ground
Broken and wasted

Muddled words
Closed off ears
A plea escapes
Forgiveness and regret
Bitter tears flow
As memories of past friendship fades

© 2012 fiery-san


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fiery-san
I would truly appreciate your reviews as well as your CONSTRUCTIVE criticism.

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"trust and respect fall to the ground broken and wasted" - i liked those lines - it so true. friendship is built on trust - all relationships are, and when you lose that trust and respect everything else crumbles down and nothing remains standing. i see you've been commented on those lines before. :) good one.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

fiery-san

11 Years Ago

Thank you for the review dreamer, I had my share of broken friendship but I've got to say, there are.. read more
The Dreamer

11 Years Ago

thats right - how much ever you say you trust that person again , there will always be some doubt re.. read more



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"trust and respect fall to the ground broken and wasted" - i liked those lines - it so true. friendship is built on trust - all relationships are, and when you lose that trust and respect everything else crumbles down and nothing remains standing. i see you've been commented on those lines before. :) good one.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

fiery-san

11 Years Ago

Thank you for the review dreamer, I had my share of broken friendship but I've got to say, there are.. read more
The Dreamer

11 Years Ago

thats right - how much ever you say you trust that person again , there will always be some doubt re.. read more
very well written many friendships fall prey to lies and deception in truth a repetitive breaker of trust winds up alone very well captured well written well done

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

fiery-san

11 Years Ago

Thank you Deron. Your words are very much appreciated. ^_^
I like the poem. You use the short statements with skill. Making the reason and purpose of the poem strong and clear. I like the flow of thoughts. Each taking the reader to a different place.
"The echoing sounds of shattering
Trust
Respect
They fall to the ground
Broken and wasted"
The above lines were my favorite. When our words become useless. There is nothing left. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

fiery-san

11 Years Ago

I'm flattered... I never been told to have such a skill... Thank you for the review, it really means.. read more
"The echoing sounds of shattering
Trust
Respect
They fall to the ground
Broken and wasted"
- I really, really like this. Short, but powerful in it's emotion-packed words

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

fiery-san

11 Years Ago

Thank you for the review, it's very much appreciated. I'm glad you like it. ^_^
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Pax
powerfully spoken.... i say in a profound way its well written taken from the core of the heart... awesome!

Posted 11 Years Ago


fiery-san

11 Years Ago

thanks kababayan, glad you like it! ^_^
A solemn message, kind of hits you right between the eyes. Very nicely written.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

fiery-san

11 Years Ago

I'm glad that this short poem still manages to make an impression on you. Thank you, Frieda. ^_^
What a strong write. You have an awesome way with words. I especially liked "The echoing sounds of shattering" I love that love good job here fiery-san.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

fiery-san

11 Years Ago

Thank you, CREEPER. I'm glad you like it. ^_^
Brilliant ! I loved the use of meaningful words describing almost and end to life, almost. Well done!

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

fiery-san

11 Years Ago

Thank you... but just to be sure... are you referring to the poem or my blog post? ^_^
omg that was deep and true!!! keep it up :))

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

fiery-san

11 Years Ago

Thank you, jamal! ^_^
I love this. The only thing I would even consider changing is one of the uses of the word "brief," but even that is not necessary, I don't think. But you could use another word like short or fleeting or whatever else you might find, if you didn't want to use it twice.
Either way, this is so sobering. Sitting here, my mind was racing and I was thinking about what to have for lunch, what to wear to my cardiology appointment, and how much I didn't feel like walking the dog. Now, all I can think about is this poem, and dishonesty. It's amazing.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

fiery-san

11 Years Ago

Thank you for the both the review and advice. They are very much appreciated. I'm glad you love the .. read more

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