Death Becomes Haiku

Death Becomes Haiku

A Poem by Richard McLin
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A man ponders what has to happen.

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My Life is Ending
You Leaving Did Not Help Me
I'll See You Again.


© 2018 Richard McLin


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Richard McLin
My first attempt at a haiku since having to do one at school. Hope you all like it.

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That gave me shivers! To evoke that in few words is really skilful. Mahalo, Izzy.

Posted 1 Year Ago


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Richard McLin

1 Year Ago

Thank you for the review.
brrrrrrrrr ... creepy... it says much in few words!

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Richard McLin

1 Year Ago

Thank you for the review.
Creepy... in a good way.

The picture gave me a touch of vertigo for a moment. But then I realized those two photographs say as much or more than the words. Then the vertigo came back.

That's some pretty good haiku my friend.



Posted 1 Year Ago


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I don't know what to say, I froze for a second after reading this. This is really good.

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Richard McLin

1 Year Ago

Wow, thank you very much.
heart started pounding and almost broke out in a cold sweat immediately. so foreboding and springloaded with powerful emotion. hits squarely between the eyes and leaves its mark. clever and creative. how many of us can relate? nice job ...

Posted 1 Year Ago


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Richard McLin

1 Year Ago

Thanks Pete
Sometimes leaving is for a better return- some ends are new beginnings- great impactful words🌹

Posted 1 Year Ago


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Richard McLin

1 Year Ago

Always look forward to your review. Thank you.
I like haikus about fish, the ones about falling for a long way off dizzingly tall buildings give me the willies.

Posted 1 Year Ago


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Richard McLin

1 Year Ago

Fish are less scary than falling, this is true.
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alot of meaning although its short

Posted 1 Year Ago


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Richard McLin

1 Year Ago

That's what I was going for. Thank you for the review.
Those were my favorite subjects in english class, the haiku and the tanka. Its short but with a lot of meaning, especially how thing can change in one second.

Posted 1 Year Ago


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Richard McLin

1 Year Ago

Thank you. Never did a tanka, I'll check that out.
Paulinette

1 Year Ago

Try it! It's really fun
You didn't ask! Lol nice job on this... they can be tricky. You nailed it! :)

Posted 1 Year Ago


Susan

1 Year Ago

Oh Gosh..on my phone and didn't see picture clearly. NOT a subject to make any humor with..I apologi.. read more

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Added on March 28, 2018
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Tags: haiku, poem, poetry, death, suicide, dark, pain, loss, life, love, men, man, woman, women, ending, haunting, ghost

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Richard McLin
Richard McLin

Salem, OR



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