One-Frame Brain

A weird poem I wrote in about five minutes... pretty cool sounding, haha. Meant to be spoken-word.

 

Days and nights

Walking talking

faking knowledge

of something beyond

me and my

one

                frame

                                brain.

 

Flash!

I'm a spark

Ember

Hot and bright

Yet so cold

So dark

Burned invisible

Burned intangible

 

Shape-shifter;

The ghost with the most.

Bending poles,

Fraying wires;

Little dendrites,

Tiny neurons;

Cells morph, multiply,

Struggle to make more sense of

me and my

one

                frame

                                brain.

 

Click!

The button, the switch

The pulse, the film

Flickers high contrast

black and white

bursts into flame

 

Burned invisible

Burned intangible

Film stuck in the rut of

me and my

one

                frame

                                brain.

Reviews

[Mark Pearce]

A self-deprecating work that shows more openness and truth than our daily lives can ever show.

Thanks for entering "The Kitchen Sink" contest.

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I felt like the click of my mouse :)
Then I Felt like the abyss of the cyber net
Very Interesting Write Indeed :)

Embrasse'
Vickie

[Rich Lampani]

This was a fun read. It was like a little walk down ADD road. I really liked it, nice write.

[Madelaine]

I love the idea of a "one frame brain." It makes me kinda sad in a way, yet it's comforting. Comforting, because it's like you only pay attention to one thing at a time. Taking things slowly, and taking the time to apprechiate all the little things. Hate it when I say "things" a lot....

Anyways, I think it makes me sad, because you're taking one bit at a time, while the world is way a head of you. You almost feel alone.

This poem brought so many different things to mind. I love it when I can explore these words through my imagination. Great write.

[Ian Fraser]

I have to read this again after I write this review, but I think I got a generally strong but subtle message throughout. I like the structure of the 'one frame brain' lines. Good work.

[Rob Welch , Master Of P..]

Wow. Excellent job. I really liked this one. You used the concept very well and it flowed very nicely. Keep up the great work!

[James Vinson]

Man I Really like this one. Great imagery and i like the was you do the one frame brain slanted. Good Job!