Very concise protrait of self doubt and self deprication. Fighting your way out of this fog can be very difficult to say the least. Much like the second one that I have already read and reviewed this is a well written description of something people have a hard time explaining to themselves, much less a friend or doctor. Nice write.
I have some constructive criticism for this poem - I feel, in my opinion, that the rhyming scheme, which gives a poem structure, conflicts slightly with the deliberate lack of punctuation, and the story/situation is a little more difficult to follow than your other work (namely Tail End Of It All). However, I like the use of language, and the lyrical style of the poem. I will be reading the further installments of the poem.
Very concise protrait of self doubt and self deprication. Fighting your way out of this fog can be very difficult to say the least. Much like the second one that I have already read and reviewed this is a well written description of something people have a hard time explaining to themselves, much less a friend or doctor. Nice write.
I know of the haze you write of. I see why you have left out the punctuation. For me, it seems that putting them in would slow up the rythmn and the uncontrolable rush would be lost. I haven't tried writing poetry for some years now, but I feel the need rising again.
For english being your 3rd language, I'm very impressed.
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