CATASTROPHE IN THE MAKING

CATASTROPHE IN THE MAKING

A Poem by FlawedByDesign
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She's left me for another man. I was too late, I shouldn't have let her get away; without her I am as good as dead...

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CATASTROPHE IN THE MAKING

I want to say I love you
But I am lost for words,
So much so, that it hurts,


Spellbound by your beauty,
Lost in your eyes,
You’ve intoxicated my mind,
Caused my heart to cry,


My emotions drown in tears,
Leaving me with only fears,
Extinguishing the light inside,
The love I once had has died,


What is a man without love?
I refuse to know so strike me down,
Let me fly with angels above,
Let me forget the here and the now,


But can I forgive and forget?
Live on, never show my regret?
My inner self is already dead,
Devoid of reason, conscience has fled,


Maybe I was too late,
Shouldn’t have let you get away,
You are my soul-mate,
I cannot continue this way.


The bridges we built will fall,
Crumble to the ground, one and all,
The paradise we built on love,
Will shatter the skies high above,


And as our paradise implodes,
Our feelings bleed onto the floor,
The world as we know will corrode,
Nothing will matter anymore,


Our story ends,
So I guess I’ll have to die.

© 2010 FlawedByDesign


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Again you do this love and loss style impeccably! I think the aabb here works really well and accentuates the style and rhythm and feelings that you are evoking within the reader. This deserves no less than 100% because of the strength of hopelessness running through it, and the articulate way in which you push it over the internet all the way here, and still make a woman cry lol...again... I'm going soft in my great age!

Posted 13 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.




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When the walls are falling in. We can feel helpless and confused. Your poem tells a story of seeing and knowing the paradise is going to hell. The story was strong and the ending was very sad. Can allow disappointment to make us want to die. All things fall for some reasons. Sometimes we can't see them till later. A excellent poem.
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Posted 13 Years Ago


Holy crap....that ending took me by surprise a bit. That is high drama! I really liked the offset rhyming scheme, I thought it worked really well. I could feel the despair turning to premature lonliness and could see this persons big picture shrinking by the second. I know I have been there and I am sure most have. Nice way to express it, I liked it.

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I love this... It really touches on a man's conception of what is happiness and heartbreak. Great read.

Posted 13 Years Ago


So heart wrenching............and lovely..........wonderful write!

Posted 13 Years Ago



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Added on June 29, 2010
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Tags: poem, poetry, love, loss, betrayal, death, torn, hurt, shattered, broken, soulmate

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FlawedByDesign

Stratford, Ontario, Canada



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The name is Ivan - I'm 31. I am originally from Bosnia and Herzegovina. I left my country in 94 because of the civil war. After emigrating, my family lived in France for 2 years before coming to Canad.. more..

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