ME, YOU AND THE ETERNAL BLUE

ME, YOU AND THE ETERNAL BLUE

A Poem by FlawedByDesign
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Me, You and the eternal blue...

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ME, YOU AND THE ETERNAL BLUE

I’ve brought you to this diamond shore,
To show you how much I adore
My precious time with you,
Amidst the eternal blue,


Your captivating scent adorns the air,
Aromatic, exotic, seductive, rare,
It draws me into your loving heart,
Knowing we will never part,


Come; let’s run hand in hand,
Let our feet grace the sand,
Moments like these I won’t forget,
Most beautiful woman I ever met,


Keep on; we’ve yet to reach the scene,
My divine flower, my fair queen,
I give you this ring to love and cherish,
From today until the day we perish.

© 2010 FlawedByDesign


Author's Note

FlawedByDesign
How I envision the proposal to my future one-and-only...

Awarded 2nd place in the following contest,
http://www.writerscafe.org/contests/Poetry-of-Color/11673/

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The title of your poem is perfect as it evokes the feeling of eternity, the forever after, and evermore. The way you introducted the poem with "diamond shore" and ended it with "this ring to love" is a nice way to come full circle with the poem and the reason behind its creation. It's a proposal that I'm sure would be irresistible.

Linda Marie Van Tassell

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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very nice

Posted 10 Years Ago


0 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Thanks for the poem I have added it to the book.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Beautiful.

Posted 10 Years Ago


0 of 1 people found this review constructive.

romantic and heart felt
beautiful

Posted 10 Years Ago


How you describe 'the shore' with diamond shows that you love this woman, because a diamond is supposed to represent the love and promise to your one and only, is it not? But all too often in these times people break this promise.

Great write, I enjoyed it. (:

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I like the scene of this poem. The use of the beach with its "diamond" sand. The two of you sharing one of the most intimate times of your new life together on a beautiful beach. Then embarking on that life long journey as one, on that big blue ocean...that Eternal Blue.
I like this poem very much. Good luck when that day comes, because you'll have much more special times to write of.


Posted 10 Years Ago


I love, love, love this poem you really captivate the meaninig of love and that of one caring for one


Posted 10 Years Ago


very graceful deliery of such a personal moment. It has a easy flow and rhyme.
Cherrie

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I adored your use of couplets to accentuate the dreamyness of this poem. IT sounds like the perfect meeting and union of two souls. Gentle yet persuasive like the call of the heart. Lol, I don't want to go back to work now...:)

Posted 10 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Quite a wonderful proposal and I wish for you this bliss............

Posted 10 Years Ago



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Stratford, Ontario, Canada



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The name is Ivan - I'm 31. I am originally from Bosnia and Herzegovina. I left my country in 94 because of the civil war. After emigrating, my family lived in France for 2 years before coming to Canad.. more..

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