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ME, YOU AND THE ETERNAL BLUE

ME, YOU AND THE ETERNAL BLUE

A Poem by FlawedByDesign
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Me, You and the eternal blue...

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ME, YOU AND THE ETERNAL BLUE

I’ve brought you to this diamond shore,
To show you how much I adore
My precious time with you,
Amidst the eternal blue,


Your captivating scent adorns the air,
Aromatic, exotic, seductive, rare,
It draws me into your loving heart,
Knowing we will never part,


Come; let’s run hand in hand,
Let our feet grace the sand,
Moments like these I won’t forget,
Most beautiful woman I ever met,


Keep on; we’ve yet to reach the scene,
My divine flower, my fair queen,
I give you this ring to love and cherish,
From today until the day we perish.

© 2010 FlawedByDesign


Author's Note

FlawedByDesign
How I envision the proposal to my future one-and-only...

Awarded 2nd place in the following contest,
http://www.writerscafe.org/contests/Poetry-of-Color/11673/

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The title of your poem is perfect as it evokes the feeling of eternity, the forever after, and evermore. The way you introducted the poem with "diamond shore" and ended it with "this ring to love" is a nice way to come full circle with the poem and the reason behind its creation. It's a proposal that I'm sure would be irresistible.

Linda Marie Van Tassell

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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This was actually a great write and heartfelt.
Very concise in your description and also a
beautiful sentiment. nicely done.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

The title of your poem is perfect as it evokes the feeling of eternity, the forever after, and evermore. The way you introducted the poem with "diamond shore" and ended it with "this ring to love" is a nice way to come full circle with the poem and the reason behind its creation. It's a proposal that I'm sure would be irresistible.

Linda Marie Van Tassell

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is a beautiful poem, and such romantic sentiments for your
future bride. It flowed of calmness and gave one such a serene
feeling. Keep up the good work.

Posted 11 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

well done flaw

Posted 11 Years Ago


I suppose it would be perfect for her!
Nice choice of words, with your customary sense of rhyme and rhythm.
Great work!

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Nice backdrop, graceful flow and well written. I really liked the feel of this. It would be a proposal most women would love I believe. Nice job.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Added on June 30, 2010
Last Updated on September 8, 2010
Tags: poem, poetry, romance, love, sky, ocean, blue, eternal, rin, diamond, beach

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FlawedByDesign
FlawedByDesign

Stratford, Ontario, Canada



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The name is Ivan - I'm 31. I am originally from Bosnia and Herzegovina. I left my country in 94 because of the civil war. After emigrating, my family lived in France for 2 years before coming to Canad.. more..

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