STOLEN HEART

She's stolen my heart ...

STOLEN HEART

Your heart sings the most beautiful of lies,
A fairy tale siren in disguise.
You’ve lured me into your cold embrace,
Ripped my beating heart out of my chest,
Left a carcass for vultures to grace.

You’ve stolen my heart the moment we met,
Extinguished the fire inside of me,
I became no more than a silhouette.

I miss the love my heart used to feel.
Giving in to that emotion would reveal
what it is that makes me real.
So I beg you to give it back, because
I want to be the man that I once was.

You’ve stolen my heart the moment we met,
Now I ask that you return what is mine,
I will forever be in your debt.

Author's Note

This is not a personal experience, just a fun little plea for other men who find themselves in such a circumstance :)

Reviews

[Sweet_pale_cacophony]

Oh! thanks for leaving that note after your poem cause i have been following your poems lately,and if one was to follow the trend,one could assume with this one that what went wrong??..but oh well then..it is fiction..
This has some very strong emotions..both men and women could be in this circumstance.I feel love once in a while does get awry,does get needy..and it is so in every relationship..
You’ve lured me into your cold embrace,
Ripped my beating heart out of my chest,
Left a carcass for vultures to grace...i feel that was a bit too harsh there,but then that is the mood you intend to set to here..so oh well..:)

[Crowley]

Great rhyming scheme on this one....that first stanza is a stunner. and how hard is it to get your heart and your CD's back at the end of a relationship. This one makes a very succinct and valid point and is very eloquently put. I loved it.

[rayven]

I love your strong choice of words!
I also really like the repetition (You've stolen my heart the moment we met).
This is a very great poem :)
Also, I just read your note. This was done amazingly well seeing as you've never had the experience :D Great job.

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There is such powerful outlet here. Quite the experience to go through. Expressed well!

[Ms. Gruye]

Ha! If you are not writing this from a personal experience, it means you've never been through the heartache of love never had but lost anyway. then count yourself lucky, my friend. You metered this piece well.

"You’ve lured me into your cold embrace,
Ripped my beating heart out of my chest,
Left a carcass for vultures to grace."

this part seems to encapsulate the whole piece, but I liked how you carried on to the last line. You worked up to the nicely and it pays off.

viva la

[Coyote Poetry]

Hard to put back a heart. I like this poem. When we get left alone and beaten down by a good woman. Ain't much left to be saved. I like the flow and the story. You can create a story. Thank you. A excellent poem.
Coyote