FORGOTTEN

FORGOTTEN

A Poem by FlawedByDesign

FORGOTTEN

The picture of me in
your eyes has faded into
the melancholy of black and white.
The love therein locked away
in the gaze of another.


You’ve closed the shutters and
chased the sun from my sky.
The world that persists
bleeds monotony.
The colours run and hide
in the gray you left behind.


My springs no longer bloom,
the summer afraid to show its face
through the darkness and gloom,
while the autumn leaves
cascade in sadness, and
the snow never wakes.


I’ve died in your dreams.
Now the memory of me wanders
the chasm of your sub-conscience;
forever trapped, unwanted.
I’ve been forgotten.

© 2010 FlawedByDesign


Author's Note

FlawedByDesign
Awarded 2nd place in the following contest:
http://www.writerscafe.org/contests/Group-Contest/11806/

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The third stanza is very powerful. While the poem mentions all of the seasons, the only one that even exists anymore is fall, "while the autumn leaves cascade in sadness." I found the line symbolic of falling out of time and place; the narrator no longer has a purpose for he has been forgotten. Powerful.

Posted 9 Years Ago


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Very deep!!!
Great poem.....

Posted 9 Years Ago


The third stanza is very powerful. While the poem mentions all of the seasons, the only one that even exists anymore is fall, "while the autumn leaves cascade in sadness." I found the line symbolic of falling out of time and place; the narrator no longer has a purpose for he has been forgotten. Powerful.

Posted 9 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Yup. You've summed it up splendidly. That's exactly it - perfectly said.

Posted 9 Years Ago


0 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Who hasn't felt like this at one time or another? Your concluding stanza is very emotive. I love that line: "I've died in your dreams" - a painful reminder of love lost.

Posted 9 Years Ago


Unrequited love is a poignant tragic tale to be told..yet it always has its lessons to be taught..

Posted 10 Years Ago


Wow I can really relate to this and this poem was soo beautiful. The emotion was very strong and so was the imagery. Absolutely amazing

Posted 10 Years Ago


Wow, how inaginative and well written this one is..I love the lines, you did a superb job on this one..lol and God bless..Kathie

Posted 10 Years Ago


"the picture of me in your eyes has faded into melancholy of black and white" Sad statement but I feel that once someone has a picture of you in their minds eye or in their heart it doesn't truly matter whether the colors are vivid. once having loved I don't believe you can ever be forgotten. This is poignant and touches upon us all

Posted 10 Years Ago


completely amazingly beautiful yet sad at the same time of it all
so much emotions in this poem
that most of us have felt at one time or another
favorite line is
"I've died in your dreams.
Now the memory of me wanders"

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

there is deep emotion in evey line, i lved this piece

Posted 10 Years Ago


0 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Added on September 20, 2010
Last Updated on October 8, 2010
Tags: poem, poetry, forgotten, lost, love, loss, cheater, infidelity, hurt

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FlawedByDesign

Stratford, Ontario, Canada



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The name is Ivan - I'm 31. I am originally from Bosnia and Herzegovina. I left my country in 94 because of the civil war. After emigrating, my family lived in France for 2 years before coming to Canad.. more..

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