LIFE THREAD

LIFE THREAD

A Poem by FlawedByDesign
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A little sappy something...

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LIFE THREAD

Your rain is my sun’s tomorrow,
The glimmer of hope in my eyes,
The song that hymns my heart to rise.


The angel I wake to every morning,
Under the sunshine of blue-gray skies,
The light that brightens my night’s guise.


You’re the wind that lays me to bed,
The kiss that tucks my dreams to sleep,
The thread that sews my life complete.

© 2010 FlawedByDesign


Author's Note

FlawedByDesign
Just a little sappy something I put together for no one in particular, sadly :(

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How quickly we forget. Ivan my friend; the one who threw my life into pure chaos and then redeemed it again. Geeze man it seems like it's been years since I've visited you. Sappy or not this is a wonderfully constructed and colorful piece. Another brilliant Mantra, another symbol of your desire for the real deal and another testament to your devotion to an ideal. I love you or that man. I hope your feeling better every day.

Posted 9 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.




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I always enjoy your writes! And I'm a sap for sappy. All in all it is powerful and finely crafted. You rock.
~LL

Posted 9 Years Ago


:(
Get Me High
I have taken my time~
sipped on his words like the sweetest wine
danced to his rhythm, drunk on his time.
Sweet words get me high,
get me high, get me high.

I have slept in his dreams,
Been awakened by his fantasies.
Touched in the breath of his desire.
Sweet dreams get me high,
get me high, get me high.

I have pressed my soul
into the pages of his mind.
Taken him places he wants to go.
Sweet man, take my hand,
take my hand and take me there.

© 2010~lovely♥lady :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


Gorgeous. Especially "The song that hymns my heart to rise -" fabulous line.

Posted 9 Years Ago


This is a nice little poem. More cliche than most of your stuff, but it's still good.

Posted 9 Years Ago


Snappy but very well written..Valentine

Posted 9 Years Ago


How quickly we forget. Ivan my friend; the one who threw my life into pure chaos and then redeemed it again. Geeze man it seems like it's been years since I've visited you. Sappy or not this is a wonderfully constructed and colorful piece. Another brilliant Mantra, another symbol of your desire for the real deal and another testament to your devotion to an ideal. I love you or that man. I hope your feeling better every day.

Posted 9 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

i think sappy is the wrong term, i think this is more woefull (if thats a word). its flows very beautifully through out the whole thing, except for this one line "the song that hymns my heart to rise" you might wanna think about replaceing the "to" to a "," this in my opinion gives it a pretty flow for the stanza. other then that you have a lovely poem that is almost perfect.

Posted 9 Years Ago


You may think of it as a little sappy, but so far all of the other reviewers, myself included, can think of ourselves as the refiner of your sap; bringing forth amazing, sweet syrup from the tree from which your poetry grows.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Brotha...I know you have feelings for me...but this may be a little too public of a venue...LOL. Sorry, couldn't help myself. This wasn't sappy at all especially with how well it was written. Some strong lines and vivid visuals. I loved it.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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FlawedByDesign
FlawedByDesign

Stratford, Ontario, Canada



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The name is Ivan - I'm 31. I am originally from Bosnia and Herzegovina. I left my country in 94 because of the civil war. After emigrating, my family lived in France for 2 years before coming to Canad.. more..

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