The Cafe

The Cafe

A Poem by Zoya

the last time
you brushed past me
in the cafe
you smelled the way
a rose smells a day before
its death

the wrinkles around your lips
told me that more than half of your life
revolved around smiling
at the wrong people
and then regretting it

whiffs of your breath
made their way to my table
and I knew you were high on
a false impression
of life

the last time the cashier
called out my name
your heart skipped a beat

I know you wanted
to look up from the book
that you were pretending to read
and steal a quick glance
at me

but you didn't

it seemed as if
the ghosts of your past
stopped you from
taking a walk
in your favourite graveyard

but tomorrow
if you build up the courage
to hold my gaze
for one eternal moment

then maybe
I'd stop searching for ways on
how to make someone fall in love

and maybe, just maybe
you would stop looking for ways on
how to not fall in love

© 2020 Zoya


Author's Note

Zoya
Thank you for reading :)

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The impression is that the speaker still bears emotional pain from a might have been that wasn't. That there was feeling for the poem's subject is apparent. The conclusions drawn indicate the once desired had, and may still have, shallow values, and that guided by them, dumped the speaker. The last two stanzas hint at the depth of that disappointment and also divulge the speaker's own weaknesses.

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Zoya

6 Days Ago

Thank you so much for the detailed review, John. Your interpenetration, for the most part, is on poi.. read more



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I actually screamed LOUD in the middle of V2 becuz my enjoyment was so intense! This is one of the best poems I've read in months. I love-love-love this one! You nail this scene with such bitingly real observations, it's a cool drink of water for someone who gets sick of everything looking and feeling predictably bland. This is sharp & tangy! God! I love it! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

Posted 6 Days Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Zoya

6 Days Ago

Best review I've read in a while! You've made my day, Margie! Thank you so very much :D
Hey,
It was a cozy read. Loved the imagery you built up. Its deep too...thanks for sharing it

Posted 1 Week Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Zoya

6 Days Ago

Thank you very much, Neetha! Means a lot :)
A great piece of writing. Loved the metaphor and the imagery was sharp and real. For a moment I was her. Well done.

Chris

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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Zoya

6 Days Ago

Ah, thank you, Christine! I'm happy you liked this piece :)
Christine Anne Shaw

6 Days Ago

I did indeed.
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a well expressed piece
of wanting that special
someone to fall in love
with you also..love
bites..and its bite is bitter


Posted 1 Week Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Zoya

6 Days Ago

I agree. I appreciate your views on my poem, Fran. Thank you so much :)
love the "favourite graveyard" stanza...
this hits home...if love stings us enough...we avoid it more than draw it towards us...play it safe.
j.

Posted 1 Week Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Zoya

6 Days Ago

Thank you so much for your insights, Jacob. I'm so glad you liked it :)
"a false impression
of life

the last time the cashier
called out my name
your heart skipped a beat"

Posted 1 Week Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

"taking a walk
in your favourite graveyard

but tomorrow
if you build up the courage
to hold my gaze
for one eternal moment"

Posted 1 Week Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I take this wonderful write to mean that a lot of pretentious people are prowling this site acting with bias, arrogance, fake pretensions, bullying, cliquish club of favorites, racist crazies, and think they are better than others. Their are not genuine in the least and very ego-centered. I could be wrong but only my interpretation. One of your best Zoya.

Posted 1 Week Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Zoya

6 Days Ago

What a unique interpretation! Although that wasn't on my mind when I wrote this, your review only se.. read more
Sami Khalil

6 Days Ago

Wow! You are welcome Zoya...
"the last time
you brushed past me
in the cafe
you smelled the way
a rose smells a day before
its death"

Posted 1 Week Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Absolutely one of the best metaphors I’ve read I put Jacob at the top but you run close second with this !!!!!! Brilliant

Posted 1 Week Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Zoya

6 Days Ago

wow thank you Julie! So kind of you :)

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