Cloudy, Cloudy Day

Cloudy, Cloudy Day

A Poem by Zoya

every once in a while
the sky above the plains
got crowded

I'd lie on the land
that was unfortunate enough
to have never kissed
a raindrop

I'd lie amidst
failed produce
and broken expectations

but the
traffic of clouds above me
would make me forget
empathy

I'd point
at my favourite cloud
hoping that
no one was looking

not because it was embarrassing
but because I wanted to keep
all beautiful things
to myself

and it was in that moment
that I'd realise

even the clouds take shape,
when will my life?

© 2020 Zoya


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This is turn-my-head-around writing! I was reading along, feeling stunned at how fresh you say each thing & how each analogy sparks a ton of ideas in my mind about what it could mean & how it relates to life. My mind was having a tug-of-war with my eyes, which wanted to read on, but my mind wanted to stop & ponder. There are huge universal implications to what you're saying here. This could symbolize looking up to God. It could be about feeling as tho we're on "the outside" looking in at everyone else's success or abundance of clouds or thirst-quenching rain. This is an example of how you express the most ordinary idea in the most extraordinary way: "land unfortunate enough to have never kissed a raindrop" -- that is the crux of what poetry is about & to top it off, it SOUNDS so delicious, definitely lyrical poetry, as well as wise in depth & meaning! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

Posted 9 Months Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Zoya

9 Months Ago

Wow Margie, amazing analogies! Thank you so much for your ever so kind words. Always appreciated :) .. read more



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I wanted to keep
all beautiful things
to myself'

this is my favorite line because this beautiful jealousy seems very nature to human beings. Overall, Its a nice read. Keep it up

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Very insightful words, life takes shape as soon as we give it shape I suppose....Love the reference to the clouds. Lovely write :)

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Beautifully vivid piece of writing. That captivated my imagination on reading and could picture it in my minds eye. Enjoyed reading it a whole lot.

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Wow such an imaginative poem, I love writing with clouds for muse so I enjoyed this fabulous super poem on dry Earth below traffic of clouds. Kudos.


plz pleez do read and comment my newest poem too. I like to know poets thoughts.


Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Kinda reminds me of drought conditions when the land has not felt rain so long it turns to a dust bowl while clouds fly along overhead and men try to make it rain by seeding the clouds ... usually to no avail.
Difficult to keep all things beautiful to yourself, but worth a try.
Thank goodness you were unable to keep this poem to yourself or we'd not have the opportunity to tell you how brilliant it is.

A good write Zoya

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Zoya

9 Months Ago

Wonderfully sweet words, Ted! Im so happy you liked it. Thank you :)
That second stanza is a really excellent way of describing a desert.

I think you should omit the very last line of this though. It narrows the focus of this poem's message.

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Zoya

9 Months Ago

I appreciate your insights Dave. Thank you so much! :)
Dave's TK Little Skin

9 Months Ago

It was very much my pleasure.
I believe if we seek the right things. Life falls into place.
"even the clouds take shape,
when will my life?"
I do believe we decide our life and thank you Zoya for sharing the amazing poetry and your thoughts.
Coyote

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Zoya

9 Months Ago

I agree, Coyote. Thank you so much for your kind words :))
Coyote Poetry

9 Months Ago

You are welcome my friend.
Land that never kissed a raindrop - also - the filed crops

I fully expected you to have selected a cloud and wished it to rain on you and your land

NO
The cloud had form > a fleeting changing form they have

Soon - I expect - your life will blossom out and take form

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Zoya

9 Months Ago

Thank you so much for your words here! Truly appreciated :)
Really liked your poetic expression here. Great imagery too. Well penned Zoya.

Chris

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Zoya

9 Months Ago

Thank you so much, Chris! Appreciate it :)
This is turn-my-head-around writing! I was reading along, feeling stunned at how fresh you say each thing & how each analogy sparks a ton of ideas in my mind about what it could mean & how it relates to life. My mind was having a tug-of-war with my eyes, which wanted to read on, but my mind wanted to stop & ponder. There are huge universal implications to what you're saying here. This could symbolize looking up to God. It could be about feeling as tho we're on "the outside" looking in at everyone else's success or abundance of clouds or thirst-quenching rain. This is an example of how you express the most ordinary idea in the most extraordinary way: "land unfortunate enough to have never kissed a raindrop" -- that is the crux of what poetry is about & to top it off, it SOUNDS so delicious, definitely lyrical poetry, as well as wise in depth & meaning! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

Posted 9 Months Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Zoya

9 Months Ago

Wow Margie, amazing analogies! Thank you so much for your ever so kind words. Always appreciated :) .. read more

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