A Poem by Mr.Commentator

Every day since we first met
Can't even eat a bit
I can't seem to think straight
When I think about how you love me
Everyday is like a holiday
 Something like Christmas Eve
My worst day is carefree
When I think about how you love me

© 2011 Mr.Commentator

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Aw oh my gosh this is so sweet

Posted 7 Years Ago

According to poetic rules close sounding words can rhyme, so "bit" and "met" meet that criteria. However, I don't believe this poem is one meant to rhyme. It seems to be a smooth flowing prose style of poetry. It almost has a meter to it, which lends to the artistic expression. All in all a nice linking of your loving thoughts put to words. I hope to see you try more variety of styles in your future poetry.

Posted 8 Years Ago

bit and met do not rhyme other then that its fairly good

Posted 8 Years Ago

Awe! That's adorable ^_^ Definitely describes what someone goes through when they're in love =)
Okay, who's the lucky girl? lol =P

Posted 8 Years Ago

1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

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4 Reviews
Added on November 28, 2011
Last Updated on November 28, 2011
Tags: Love, Erotica



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