Lovely Lady

Lovely Lady

A Poem by forevermore1218
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When I was in Alaska, there was this one lady that would only stare at the fire and not make a sound. I have been trying to figure out her thoughts and during that, I wrote Lovely Lady.

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Lovely Lady sitting by the golden fire

watching the ashes fall to the ground

with a mind only focused on the burning flames

why do you never make a sound?

 

Lovely Lady watching smoke fade away

what is it you are trying to find?

though you may see something only in your eyes

do you think the rest of the world is blind?

 

Lovely Lady with dark eyes shining bright

what is it you are searching for on this night?

through the open flames, your breath is taken away

but will it return on the beginning of a new day?

 

Lovely Lady with a silent still face

the fire in your heart has taken over this place

what will happen when that fire dies?

 

will you live,

or will the light be taken from your eyes?

© 2012 forevermore1218


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An interesting poem! Reminds me of a character from "A Song of Ice and Fire", Melisandre, she was a "red priestess" who could see the future in her flames.
I suppose the lady found tranquility in those flames, so that's why she was staring at them. xD
Anyways, an awesome poem, especially the ending!

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

forevermore1218

11 Years Ago

thanx man for being my first reviewer and for your comment :)
Tomislav Petricevic

11 Years Ago

You're welcome! :)



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Excellent piece. Reminds me of a movie memory: "You talk a lot. Do you ever just listen?" ... "To what?" ... "To the silence?"
A very visual piece and I can see the reason a visual writer would be inspired; she could be remembering, spiritually visiting someone remembered even. Places like Alaska hold a strangeness to what we call the norm, when spirituality is the norm there.
Thanks for sharing this 100/100

Posted 7 Years Ago


A very good story type poem. Well done...:)

Posted 10 Years Ago


Ooh i so very much enjoyed reading this poem :) You did a fantastic job at imagery and creating a story line, kinda makes me wanna read it again x) great job!

Posted 11 Years Ago


forevermore1218

11 Years Ago

Thank you :) I love your work as well!
Kohleen

11 Years Ago

why thanks :D
Hmm I like this. Very good.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Ahh, I loved this! One my favorite's from you. Normally, switching rhyme schemes irk to no end, but here somehow it went with the piece nicely. Nicely penned.

Posted 11 Years Ago


forevermore1218

11 Years Ago

Thank you so man! I am very happy you like this one :)
Beautiful poem, I love the feeling I had while reading this. You have set a nice image of the "Lovely Lady" and her fire and that's what I like the most in this poem. Ending was great and love the mystery that is left to be answered.

Keep at the good work, and thank you for a beautiful read as always.
-Urosh

Posted 11 Years Ago


forevermore1218

11 Years Ago

as always, i Iove your reviews. Thank you very much mate :)
Wow! that's haunting, gorgeous, and excellent. I love it.

Posted 11 Years Ago


forevermore1218

11 Years Ago

thanks owl, I really appreciate it :)
Mystical! I like the way you expressed your feelings through this, it's powerful, and there's one or two verses of asking rhythm in the each stanza, and i like that idea. Specially like the ending! Thanks for sharing..Keep it up buddy :D

Posted 11 Years Ago


forevermore1218

11 Years Ago

thank you!!!!!!!!
R.A. Youngblood

11 Years Ago

You're welcome!! xD
It's interesting watching people sometimes, trying to put yourself in their mind. It makes me wonder if anyone has ever tried to interpret my spacing out. This is really good. "the fire in your heart has taken over this place" - very nice.

Posted 11 Years Ago


forevermore1218

11 Years Ago

thank you so much man :)

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