Train Ride

 

So here I am on this cold morning.

Boarding the 9:10 to nowhere

Just to go and be free without warning

To search for feelings that say I care.

 

I started to recollect on my thoughts

On what I wanted my life to be

The longer I thought the more I got lost.

So slowly I leaned my head back to see

 

Destinations stops shadow my life.

Next Stop First Love, Like a broken Song.

I cringed as I recalled my first love bite

We had met at a time and place so wrong.

 

Only to fall in love, with a Puppy-love bark

And to end with only a sorrow good-bye

She broke the news at our favorite park

About her cheating, and all of her lies

 

The train had suddenly come to a halt,

I raise my head to see a cute Blonde leave.

I smiled only to be judged by default.

I can't believe I acted so naive.

 

Boringly out the window I looked.

To see the never-ending clouds

A few more words from my hands I shook

I thought of how my dad might be proud.

 

About all the things I had done

I sometimes wish that he was here

Just to bond that old father and son

and at this thought sheds a lonely tear

 

I start to write more steadily now

About the good times and the bad

The more it happens the more I vow

To never be broken or even sad

 

But that falls to pieces every time

Someone walks in and shatters my life

Just for once i would like to Shine.

To finally make these things right.

 

I slowly close my eyes to dream

and selfishly wish for happier days

But I’m doomed or so it seems

To repeat this heart-broken phase

 

So here i am Riding this Train

Accompanied by this lonely seat

Searching for someone who belongs

Next to me, to make me complete.

 

Reviews

[Aileen]

wow! powerful. i like it. but you dont always nead someone . some times all you nead is u. and that can be the best company of all. keap up th great work
luv ya
Aileen

[Pointblank]

You are complete all by yourself. You only need search for someone to add to your greatness. We all ride this train of hopes, dreams and memories. It seems though you judge yourself to harshly. Maybe the blonde in your poem had issues of her own. Remember this journey and keep writing about the experiences you face. I think you have the knack for expressing it. Very Good!

[Pj]

Gosh you poor bugger- so much pain woven into your heart, just starting to heal, I pray.
Thank you for being brave and sharing your soul.

[Lara]

It has a gorgeous flow to it and is easy to identify with. I have learnt to shine with and without people now but your poem reminded me of a time in my life I was too niave to be able to. I enjoy the darkness and the way it makes me feel, it helps me embrace my ignorance when younger. I love being able to look back and think 'you've learnt a lot'.

[THE BLACK SEAL]

this is very nicely done. i love it..library material

[Sparrow]

What a nice trip down memory lane with a clean format and rhyme scheme and a good blend of past vs future in the last stanza. Great write.