somniloquy

somniloquy

A Chapter by freelancejouster

 

 

 

 

 

 

muttered breaths,

mumbling cries,

murmuring conversations,

spoken right next to your ear.

 

you awake drowsiliy,

half-heartedly,

but cannot block him out well enough

to stay asleep while he speaks nonsense,

though he does.

 

a stammer,

a sigh,

and a hint of a laugh,

his arms pulling you a bit closer,

without realizing it,

and you lean into his chest,

a small smile upon your face,

as this quirk of his

endears itself upon you.

 

and then he whispers something garbled,

followed by a smile,

and a wound to your heart,

as the name he says so lovingly

belongs to someone else.

 

 

 

 

 

 



© 2011 freelancejouster


Author's Note

freelancejouster
somniloquy: the act of talking in one's sleep. sleeptalking.

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Awww... this was so sad. I can't even imagine being in that position. I love that you were so creative with the word you chose to portray, creating a scene that most people wouldn't suspect upon hearing the word and its definition. I think this poem was your best so far in this collection, because it was so deep and meaningful. The word choice was great and there weren't any places where I stumbled; the words flowed easily and the image was easy to imagine.

100/100 for this one. :)

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i don't know which is worse: hearing someone else's name when the other is sleeptalking or during sex. interesting point of view.

Posted 7 Years Ago


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I do love that word, not so much for its meaning, but the phonetic appeal ha - somniloquy! I love how you've played on the word here, the revealing of the subconscious exposed by parasomnias - only for it not to be quite what she wanted to hear ha!! bittersweet poem, marvelling at the psyche and mind!

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Awww... this was so sad. I can't even imagine being in that position. I love that you were so creative with the word you chose to portray, creating a scene that most people wouldn't suspect upon hearing the word and its definition. I think this poem was your best so far in this collection, because it was so deep and meaningful. The word choice was great and there weren't any places where I stumbled; the words flowed easily and the image was easy to imagine.

100/100 for this one. :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Damn. The last line definitely got me. Loved it.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

wow... i thought it was going to be a sweet poem, happily ever after type... but i guess i should know by now that that's not how you write lol.. good work, keep it up dear!
*cocoabean*

Posted 9 Years Ago


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this is nice

Posted 9 Years Ago



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Added on February 16, 2011
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Tags: humor, dark, sad, love, life, sleeping, talking


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