pranks and lies and those who play and tell them

pranks and lies and those who play and tell them

A Poem by freelancejouster

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

speak in riddles,

let me feel your forked tongue

tangle itself in the effort.

 

tell me lies,

remind me that i've nothing,

really, to complain about.

after all, i'm better off than

those whispered about thems,

aren't i?

 

the pressure rises,

lashes out at honesty,

erases any ideas of

forgiveness or gratitude.

 

 

 

a color-filled funeral procession

of a snake who no one missed

until a year or so after he was gone

when they had to start blaming someone else.

 

they created that ghost,

you understand,

figments, you're feeling figments

coursing through your veins.

 

they replaced your fix with syrup,

didn't you know?

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

© 2011 freelancejouster


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OT
nice!! I agree with SK below, the word choice is nice - at times it is a little clinical - which lends so well to the distaste of the snake who gets tongue tied on their own tongue - spitting lies - and then the realisation - well now they're gone who're we going to blame? ha! I like! and the final couplet - great way to end!! I liked! a lot!!

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I love it!! It's a brilliant poem! it's really edgy and different!

Posted 9 Years Ago


I could have sworn I reviewed this. Your first stanza actually made me laugh, but not in a happy way. I felt and recognized that. Great turn of phrase. Often people are "misremembered" when they pass. It leaves you wanting to yell What??? Seriously? A color filled funeral procession of a snake noone missed. I love this. Such vivid imagery and feel.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

A thought provoking poem unlike anything I have read which is fantastic I love the imagery and the concept of this piece it shows a different style which is great a faultless piece of writing well done

100/100

Posted 9 Years Ago


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OT
nice!! I agree with SK below, the word choice is nice - at times it is a little clinical - which lends so well to the distaste of the snake who gets tongue tied on their own tongue - spitting lies - and then the realisation - well now they're gone who're we going to blame? ha! I like! and the final couplet - great way to end!! I liked! a lot!!

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

:) placebo humor is edgy and wonderful. I loved every syllable of this strange and wonderful piece. made me think....and even feel a bit. Great write!

I love being one of "those whispered about thems"

it's great fun!

Posted 10 Years Ago


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Added on March 2, 2011
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