Hanging up my heart.

Hanging up my heart.

A Poem by Freeman

You,are the one I fell for
BANG,
Without doubt.
Like the crashing of a tidal
Uncontrolled,
go without
a condition,contract
a scream or a shout.

You are the one I fell for
BANG,
It hits us all
so I clasp so very gently
And pin my heart upon the wall.

© 2010 Freeman


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Yes when love hit us. No turning back. A powerful poem. Direst and to the point. I like the complete poem. It is outstanding.
Coyote

Posted 8 Years Ago


Like a sucker punch that leaves you gasping, I picture buying a heart at the cash register for a buck, writing my name on it and hanging it with the ten thousand other hearts from people that have checked out through the same line. Nice work, I really liked this.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Inspired by Solomon Burke

Im hanging up my heart for you

Posted 8 Years Ago


I was going to nail it but wanted to keep the delicateness at the end of this piece.


Thanks for reviewing

Freeman

Posted 8 Years Ago


Sounds more BANG, like your, BANG, nailing your heart up on the wall.... which in some cases might not be a bad idea.
You have a solid feel and clear words with your poetry, a recognizable voice.

Posted 8 Years Ago


And pin my heart upon the wall..if only it was as easy not to fall..:)
a delight to read..

Posted 8 Years Ago


At times, it's not my heart I'd like to pin on the wall, but my mind.....gets me in all kinds of weird situations that end up in worse than BANG.....Nice writing.

Posted 8 Years Ago


I the how you distributed the emphasis of the "bang" its sts the tone in the opening and then is reallized throughout the body of the poem. really nice write

Posted 8 Years Ago


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Freeman

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