Keeper of the secret

Keeper of the secret

A Poem by Freeman
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How my mind works

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The mirror returns an image 
But not one I believe,
Aesthetic has no value
as far as I can see,
deep and shallow thoughts
Sweeping through your mind
Dig a little deeper
you never will define,
I see as you do
we will never know, 
The owner is the keeper
this keeper never shows.
 

© 2010 Freeman


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I see a stranger in my mirror. Sometime I feel like I'm in the wrong place.. Few of us can see inside our mind and soul. I feel I got too many demons hidden and they need to stay buried. I like this poem. You made me think. We allow few inside our mind and life. I like the last lines. A outstanding poem.
Coyote

Posted 8 Years Ago


Freeman, I was following the poem and reacting to it as I read. When I said you had some s**t going on, I refer to your ability. The rest of the comment was too much personal whiplash that I feel now relates to too few. You help me to understand some limits and the nature of the poetic animal of which I'm included.
Sensitivity is huge. The emotion from me comes from my wishes for you in a tired review that I will not revisit the rest of my life. I did not wish to infuriate. Just mezmerized with my own wee sense of goodness while I type another nut comment during compromised times. I'll name my goodness Fido. "Get down Fido. You're jumping up on my shoelace and bothering the hell out of me."


Posted 8 Years Ago


Please dont review my life and think you understand me, you will never do that Mr Shultzfeather. This isnt constructive ,not sure what it is , maybe too deep for me.But glad it evokes some emotion in you.

Many thanks

Posted 8 Years Ago


Not bellieving self comes from your first two lines, art shallow which you suggest in the poem, move over Beethoven since it reminded me of Bach. You took care like Bach stepping through your Poem. Listen to what part of you is speaking right now. I hoped you would relate to that part of your mind that knows how you relate which I feel would be helpful. That is where you show. you got some s**t going on (like nice style)and you're not listening to you. I did not like the perspective that suggests we share this perspective. LIsten and identify. (too much, I learn, but not meant to be a personal attack. Like keep identifying with yourself. Bull in a China shop relates-referring to me now) The emotion comes from my wishes for you, which came misguided. Have I back-pedalled enough. I'm becoming more aware of my tap dancing ability which I had no clue about before.

Posted 8 Years Ago


0 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I always like mirror references. The whole inner/outer reflection thing.

Posted 8 Years Ago


great write^^ i enjoyed reading ~chillz~

Posted 8 Years Ago



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Freeman
Freeman

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