Raven Bluff

Wrote this whilst listening to Ghost Song by Max Ablitzer, music included. Hope you enjoy the music as much as I did.

I flew with the dark raven

   for he was the only one

   who could taste or see

   such  insanely sweet madness in me

   he perched himself right astride

   without cawing a sound

   naught a lecture to take care

Mockingly looming overhead

   he stared me straight in the eye

So smooth and lovingly lush he sailed 

   soared within me to new heights

   before we burst into fluid flight 

I took him in languidly 

   hauntingly mysterious elixir

   a cryptic spirit unto himself

Cracked half a vitriolic sad smile

   whilst he prepared me for sin

Knocking back at my door

  to taunt me raving yet afresh

  he sing songs his intoxication into me,

  then takes me for a mystical rendezvous

  raven's song so tastefully contrived

              we sing together,

                           twisted in consumption

                                                   the dark raven in me

                                                                    never judges  

 

Author's Note

Reviews

[Tai Ryens]

Mystical, black ravens taking you out on ethereal dates and slowly embedding itself into your soul, becoming forever a part of you (hence the singing together in the end, and the dark raven IN you never judging). What a dark centerpiece for a love felt by a person trying to empty themself.. Well done.

[Frieda P]

You dug deep for this one Tai, always love to read your interpretations, glad you enjoyed this one...thanks so much.

[charlie chops]

um , not too bad also good too , but please if next time you write again , more rhythm!!!!!!!!!! hope you will did more good work , i love to see poem !!!!!! Thanks for your wonderful poem !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

[Frieda P]

Thanks for reading!

[Kajal Gulabani]

Dark and piercing.. Interesting stuff. :)

[Frieda P]

Grazie Kajal, much appreciated. :-)

[Jess]

huhu!the dark seduction ,,very powerful write Madam F

[Frieda P]

Glad you liked it khicks!

[Revery]

Hmmm, the darker lure of seduction. An overwhelming pull. Very Strong write. I love it, powerful!!!

[Frieda P]

Thanks, sometimes the ghosts win....

[Revery]

Sometimes

[Frieda P]

More often than I care for them to visit...I think you know what I mean...

[Revery]

yup

[Carolann Dowsett]

This is rather dark I get the sense that the darkness sometimes tries to lure you into its embrace. Stay in the light Frieda, its warmer here :) Another captivating poem.

[Frieda P]

ha I know, sometimes the dark feels more familiar though! Thanks Carolann!

[Carolann Dowsett]

Welcome and yes that's the trick of it :)

[Frieda P]

;-)

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Another nice poem and well inspired.

[Frieda P]

Nice like ice. ;-P

[John Alexander McFadyen]

No ice. I can se you listening to this piece and the words flowing from the music. A lovely way to inspire words.

[Zachary_James]

I thought this was so briliantly done, you have a writing style that is just so refreshing. My overall thought is this was amazing.

[Frieda P]

Much appreciated Zachary, so delighted you like this one!

[chandlerl]

Lovely writing...beautiful writing...i ...i loved this.
it makes me think of that dark part of people, the dark yet beautiful soul that i believe everyone has inside them selves. Very well written.
-C

[Frieda P]

Ahh you're familiar with that dark it seems, thanks for the read, much appreciated.

[xXChanceXx]

I like this. I like the dark mood to it. Beautiful write.

[Frieda P]

Yes there was a very mood that night, thanks so much Chance for the read.

[xXChanceXx]

Yeah.. You're welcome. :)

[Lexi I.]

Oh, the raven. There is so much dark symbolism to the bird so often used in literature. Death, grief, darkness. He is the animal who would recognize the "insanely sweet madness" within us. I feel like he represents a kind of "drug" in this instance; he is the one taking you on a "mystical rendezvous" and "soaring to new heights." The raven is an addiction, always knocking on the door. Just a few thoughts.

[Frieda P]

You read me well, as a 'drug' is very apropos in this instance. Thanks for the read...