Raven Bluff

Raven Bluff

A Poem by Frieda P
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Wrote this whilst listening to Ghost Song by Max Ablitzer, music included. Hope you enjoy the music as much as I did.

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I flew with the dark raven
   for he was the only one
   who could taste or see
   such  insanely sweet madness in me
   he perched himself right astride
   without cawing a sound
   naught a lecture to take care
Mockingly looming overhead
   he stared me straight in the eye
So smooth and lovingly lush he sailed 
   soared within me to new heights
   before we burst into fluid flight 
I took him in languidly 
   hauntingly mysterious elixir
   a cryptic spirit unto himself
Cracked half a vitriolic sad smile
   whilst he prepared me for sin
Knocking back at my door
  to taunt me raving yet afresh
  he sing songs his intoxication into me,
  then takes me for a mystical rendezvous
  raven's song so tastefully contrived


              we sing together,
                           twisted in consumption
                                                   the dark raven in me
                                                                    never judges  


 

© 2013 Frieda P


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Mystical, black ravens taking you out on ethereal dates and slowly embedding itself into your soul, becoming forever a part of you (hence the singing together in the end, and the dark raven IN you never judging). What a dark centerpiece for a love felt by a person trying to empty themself.. Well done.

Posted 7 Years Ago


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Frieda P

7 Years Ago

You dug deep for this one Tai, always love to read your interpretations, glad you enjoyed this one.... read more



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um , not too bad also good too , but please if next time you write again , more rhythm!!!!!!!!!! hope you will did more good work , i love to see poem !!!!!! Thanks for your wonderful poem !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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Posted 8 Years Ago


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Frieda P

8 Years Ago

Thanks for reading!
Dark and piercing.. Interesting stuff. :)

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Posted 8 Years Ago


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Frieda P

8 Years Ago

Grazie Kajal, much appreciated. :-)
huhu!the dark seduction ,,very powerful write Madam F

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Posted 8 Years Ago


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Frieda P

8 Years Ago

Glad you liked it khicks!
Hmmm, the darker lure of seduction. An overwhelming pull. Very Strong write. I love it, powerful!!!

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Revery

8 Years Ago

Sometimes
Frieda P

8 Years Ago

More often than I care for them to visit...I think you know what I mean...
Revery

8 Years Ago

yup
This is rather dark I get the sense that the darkness sometimes tries to lure you into its embrace. Stay in the light Frieda, its warmer here :) Another captivating poem.

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Frieda P

8 Years Ago

ha I know, sometimes the dark feels more familiar though! Thanks Carolann!
Carolann Dowsett

8 Years Ago

Welcome and yes that's the trick of it :)
Frieda P

8 Years Ago

;-)
Another nice poem and well inspired.

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Posted 8 Years Ago


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Frieda P

8 Years Ago

Nice like ice. ;-P
John Alexander McFadyen

8 Years Ago

No ice. I can se you listening to this piece and the words flowing from the music. A lovely way to i.. read more
I thought this was so briliantly done, you have a writing style that is just so refreshing. My overall thought is this was amazing.

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Posted 8 Years Ago


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Frieda P

8 Years Ago

Much appreciated Zachary, so delighted you like this one!
Lovely writing...beautiful writing...i ...i loved this.
it makes me think of that dark part of people, the dark yet beautiful soul that i believe everyone has inside them selves. Very well written.
-C

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Posted 8 Years Ago


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Frieda P

8 Years Ago

Ahh you're familiar with that dark it seems, thanks for the read, much appreciated.
I like this. I like the dark mood to it. Beautiful write.

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Frieda P

8 Years Ago

Yes there was a very mood that night, thanks so much Chance for the read.
xXChanceXx

8 Years Ago

Yeah.. You're welcome. :)
Oh, the raven. There is so much dark symbolism to the bird so often used in literature. Death, grief, darkness. He is the animal who would recognize the "insanely sweet madness" within us. I feel like he represents a kind of "drug" in this instance; he is the one taking you on a "mystical rendezvous" and "soaring to new heights." The raven is an addiction, always knocking on the door. Just a few thoughts.

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Frieda P

8 Years Ago

You read me well, as a 'drug' is very apropos in this instance. Thanks for the read...

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