Raven Bluff

Wrote this whilst listening to Ghost Song by Max Ablitzer, music included. Hope you enjoy the music as much as I did.

I flew with the dark raven

   for he was the only one

   who could taste or see

   such  insanely sweet madness in me

   he perched himself right astride

   without cawing a sound

   naught a lecture to take care

Mockingly looming overhead

   he stared me straight in the eye

So smooth and lovingly lush he sailed 

   soared within me to new heights

   before we burst into fluid flight 

I took him in languidly 

   hauntingly mysterious elixir

   a cryptic spirit unto himself

Cracked half a vitriolic sad smile

   whilst he prepared me for sin

Knocking back at my door

  to taunt me raving yet afresh

  he sing songs his intoxication into me,

  then takes me for a mystical rendezvous

  raven's song so tastefully contrived

              we sing together,

                           twisted in consumption

                                                   the dark raven in me

                                                                    never judges  

 

Author's Note

Reviews

[Tai Ryens]

Mystical, black ravens taking you out on ethereal dates and slowly embedding itself into your soul, becoming forever a part of you (hence the singing together in the end, and the dark raven IN you never judging). What a dark centerpiece for a love felt by a person trying to empty themself.. Well done.

[Frieda P]

You dug deep for this one Tai, always love to read your interpretations, glad you enjoyed this one...thanks so much.

[DIVYA]

My raven that knows and yet loves me.
You've given the black raven a whole new image and what a stunning makeover!

[Frieda P]

Thanks muchly Divya, so happy you enjoyed this one!

[Lover Of Words]

Another amazing poem from the Breath taking writer... Friweda :) no words but amazing!

[Frieda P]

Thanks Kelsey, I'm so glad you like this one, I was really moved by the music.

[Lover Of Words]

I loved it

[Frieda P]

:-) from Friweda x

[Lover Of Words]

;-) Back at ya love!

[Frieda P]

doing the happy dance ;-D

[Lover Of Words]

haha dancing in the chair so I dont hurt myself anymore :D

[Frieda P]

haha chair dancing is just as effective if you have your butt
planted right! ;-)

[Lover Of Words]

Hahahaha i think i do hahaha dont want too hurt my butt either... ;-) then id be useless....

[Frieda P]

LOL I'm not even gonna touch that one! ;-P

[Lover Of Words]

LOL best not too ;-D

[Frieda P]

Hey even with my big mouth, I know when to keep quiet!

[Lover Of Words]

Haha... Im sure you do!

[kara_marissa]

You have a style that I enjoy immensely. Strong, dark, and plays to my curiosity. Kudos, again. I'm a fan.
Kara M.

[Frieda P]

Thanks kara, nice to meet you and thanks for reading me. I don't know if this is my 'style' per say, I'm all over the place, I just write whatever moves me in the moment, do appreciate the read.

[KAOlmsted]

Frieda's got style for miles... ;-)

[kara_marissa]

Indeed she does!

[Frieda P]

Oh geez I don't pay you enough the kimmer lol ;-)

[KAOlmsted]

I was going to mention that...the check's late ;-)

[Frieda P]

ha sorry about that, you know i had to sell my soul to the devil for this poem.. ;-)

[KAOlmsted]

And I appreciate it ;-) (Sorry for the late response; I just discovered someone quite good!)

[Frieda P]

care to share?

[Sheila Kline]

Oh, it is sooooooo cool to write a poem while listening to music!! The poem is a perfect match for it!!
Great job in matching the somber mood of it!

[Frieda P]

Especially when you've got a piece so enthralling as that one...thanks so much Shelia, glad you enjoyed it!

[ms. barrie]

another brilliant gem of a poem your words captured here, it's as if your words ensnares the reader into your web with your immense gift for words, which never ceases to amaze me, Frieda, (shakes head) ;)

[Frieda P]

Thanks Barrie, you're too kind as always, glad you enjoyed it, I fell in love with that music, so haunting...I was so moved, had to put pen to paper, you know how that goes... ;-)

[ms. barrie]

you verily welcomed, and i'm just being honest. i agree, wow, this is a hauntingly gorgeous music, yes i knew that feeling once, i was moved by "in a house without a heartbeat" from the 28 days later soundtrack, then "the witches' tree" came to light. this has been a pleasure to read, Frieda :)

[Frieda P]

Yes, some music just lend themselves to a write, then they practically write themselves...much appreciated, as always! ;-)

[ms. barrie]

:) ((hugs and faerie dust)))

[Frieda P]

oh goodie, will fairy dust help me sleep? ;-) xo

[ms. barrie]

yes, i also included some chamomile tea in the package for you to help you relax and drift off into sweet dreams (or naughty) which ever you prefer :) xoxx

[Frieda P]

hahha, I'm not saying ;-P

[ms. barrie]

"i'll never tell" :))

[Annabelle Lee]

What a wonderful write

[Frieda P]

Thanks Annabelle, I actually sorta like this one myself, and you know critical we poets are....

[Deron Alexis]

ravens are my favorite people scorn them but they have a beauty about them in their numbers color and attitude as if they would never judge to find a person like that would be nice it seems the better you try to be the more judgement and lectures you get and not just from authority but from those who you thaought had your back for having it's sake

[Frieda P]

'favorite people' ha....I'm starting to understand you better! ;-)

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Absolutely fabulous... Poe would be proud... many think of ravens as symbols of death where I see them more as protectors of the down and out.

[Frieda P]

ha, he just rolled over again ;-)
thanks so much Dale!

[KAOlmsted]

Questo pezzo è così buona che cadde in italiano, grazie a Google translate :-D

Bello...

[Frieda P]

Io spero che Lei non si facesse male quando Lei cade! Baci a Lei il mio caro amico, io stavo sperando che Lei lo leggerebbe da quando io figurai Lei sarebbe il solamente uno per dedurrlo....Lei è il bello ;-)

[KAOlmsted]

Ah crap; I already closed out Google translate *laugh* BRB...

Oh! :-D Thank you :-x And, my pleasure, of course.

[Frieda P]

Still waiting on you gf.... ;-)

[Robbie~xoxo~]

I believe the darkness of the Raven lives in all of us. Some may fear it, some may surrender to it. You have written an intriguing piece which haunts the corners of my mind. Excellent write!

[Frieda P]

Cool, I don't think I've ever haunted anyone before. ;-) Thanks for the read!