Frozen Wedding Cake

We tripped over that fine line,

     fell from gracious love 

           to stark indifference

my shoes from another life,

    couldn't take it in stride

all the words turned upside down

   feelings of kind regard expired

playing games with new rules

   no stop signs in sight

do not pass go,

 collect as much as you can

 perfect wedding cake

 never even had a chance to thaw

drunk on toasts of cruel resentment

we said no matter what, 

       "always remain friends"

pop goes the weasel 

             and  f*****g fairy tales

pay with blood signed

 _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _on the dotted line

Reviews

[redflutterby]

Marriage takes hard work which directly conflicts with the romantic ideal we've been sold by fairy tales. You're right it doesnt take much to go from gracious love to stark indifference especially when people don't put in the effort. Then comes the inevitable resentment! Your way with words always amazes me and i cant think of one single thing that would make this poem more striking. *clapping wildly* :-D

[Frieda P]

As you know Red, I was writing this one whilst we were discussing all this 'divorce' drama...so glad it covered that feeling & thank you..
takes a bow. ;-P

[redflutterby]

;-D

[Frieda P]

Sorry can't reply here, I'm still laughing from your last statement! ;-P

[redflutterby]

Hahahaha...

[The Iron Horseman]

This certainly gives a disturbing insight into how rapidly and easily a marriage can collapse and die. Very well written and impressively presented. Well done!

[Michael G.]

I don't have anything against marriage. It is still a very fine institution and a blending of two lives. It isn't easy... but still doable.
It's the divorce that's the pain. And all the crap leading up to it and the fallout afterward.
But, you penned this very true and sadly, accurate. Let's see, the top layer comes out on the first anniversary in celebration, right? (Hate those dotted lines.)

[Frieda P]

Ha yes, it's not the marriage, but the divorce that'll get you every time...dotted lines are bad news, unless you're signing for a lottery ticket...as if. Thanks Mike....have a great weekend!

[PP]

You ascertain my beliefs Frieda !

[Frieda P]

hahaha, it's dangerous, everyone should do it once!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Whoa vitriol at its stark Frieda best! Flowing tripping slaps of words. Reminds me of a joke called 'Cut the Cake', too rude to post here though! lol

[Frieda P]

Jazzing on this review John... Ha, I'd love to hear that one!

[Rogue]

Sadly, This is a road many of us have found ourselves on in our journey through life.
For me it was actually Pearl Jams "Betterman" that woke me up and made me realize I didn't want to be the woman in that song anymore.

Great job not only conceptualizing, but truly conveying the feelings of hurt, disappointment and anger here.

[Frieda P]

Amazing what music can do huh? Thanks for your gracious review Rogue.

[Kairi Lucio]

Wow this is really good! Crazy how backwards a marriage could be.

[Frieda P]

Thanks for the visit and your review Kairi, much appreciated.

[Frieda P]

Wonderful how the irony of a wedding as well can be articulate by you Frieda, which actually happenes so often in life, marriages can fail yes ... your metaphors realms above everything, well written. Truly... :) xo

- Elisa

[Frieda P]

Thanks sweet Eli, watching my son endure this pain has revived the entire painful scenario, you may see more of these, pardon me if I make a mess here...thanks so much :-) xo

You're so welcome, really don't worry, I love your writing, it's pure, and honest... I am one of those who can handle pain ;) nothing is too worse for me, really. xoxo most welcome lovely!

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

Marriage is not for the faint of heart, I am sure. It's funny, you always see the prince and princess kiss and ride off into the sunset, but you never see them six months down the road when she is trying to tend house, he's irritable, they don't know how to communicate, etc. I agree with "Red"--marriage, in a lot of ways, seems to contradict the very romantic ideal. Still, it's something I would happily endure for the right person. Well written!

[Frieda P]

We always go into it thinking it's the 'right person' that's the b***h of it....thanks so much Friday.

[Holly Mason]

I absolutely love this
what a forgotten wedding achievement left in a freezer never to thaw until it hits the can upon loves final clean out
yes it holds so much that cake-dream wishes can turn to resentment quickly
disney has fairy tales -but no cakes in the freezer just cash in a drawer
and f**k that weasel to
thank you for sharing

[Frieda P]

Haha, this actually made me laugh out loud...! Thanks Holly.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Wow! strong and powerful wordsplay. Love the last part Frie, it is relatable and genuine. Thanks for sharing such a brilliant piece.

[Frieda P]

The last part is the truest for anyone that's been there, thanks so much Marc.