Dark Shadows

All you see 

is the shadow that I cast, 

not the true likes of me

      I walked you through 

my untimely history

     so you could witness clearly,

        your silence speaks volumes

   do you really want to know me?

You burrowed your way

  into the warm recesses of my bosom

yet, I know you only hunger

 the flesh and blood of me

   my psyche is more than you could digest

   yet, when you trace my tears,

 you entrance me to overtake the night

     In the naked light of day,

           glimpses that this could never be

I know just what you're thinking,

    my twists in and out of sanity

                 would drive you to the brink

acceptance and unconditional

            are not part of our analogy

   I bask in the tenderness of the moment

 knowing  full well,

      you don't want to play for love

 this boulevard of empty promises 

                    will soon find an ending

Reviews

[Blue Ivory]

It's wrong to judge a book by its cover, but I'm afraid it's a crime we're all guilty of. Although it's excusable from both ends of the situation. It's a grey area kind of thing. Sometimes we actually let our guards down, trusting we've found someone who will actually understand what's going on underneath the surface.

"Do you really want to know me?" I love that line. It has serious impact on the entire stanza, contradicting everything you just said. It raises a feeling of doom, realizing a bit too late that you've already undressed your soul in front of him, before even asking if he wanted to see all of your broken pieces in the first place.

Letting people in almost always leads to disappointment. And nearly everyone's guilty of that crime too. You trust someone, and every time he touches you, he heals you, sometimes without even realizing just how much he means to you. Then he throws it away, because it obviously didn't mean the same to him. And sometimes our crazy is too much for people to handle.

"This boulevard of empty promises will soon find an ending". Another excellent line. It's true.

Your poem reminds me of the song Just Give Me A Reason. Oh and by the way, all of this is what I meant by being able to relate to your poetry ;)

[Frieda P]

I'm so sorry I missed this outstanding review Siren, I love that song, think it was my mantra for a long while...your words touched me, thanks so much.

[Blue Ivory]

You are welcome C:

[Frieda P]

So sorry about that Siren, my alerts seem to mess up on me...much appreciate your visits always. :-)

[Blue Ivory]

I won't be here 4 a while. My keyboar ist wrkig right :P

[Frieda P]

Hate when that happens, I lost my a and s the other day...are they sticking?

[Blue Ivory]

I spille water on it -_- So I have 2 cpy paste letters 2 type aythig -_- Till I get a ew cmputer, & my exams are over, Im screwe lol

[Frieda P]

Ouch...good luck with exams...hurry back :-)

[Blue Ivory]

Thank you :3

[Frieda P]

xo

[James Hanna-Magill]

Dear Frieda

Often I say too much.

This time I say too little.

'Moved'

With my best wishes

James

[Frieda P]

Thanks James, 'moved' is a perfect review, much appreciated.

[James Hanna-Magill]

Dear Frieda

I assure you it is my brevity in review relative to others on this site which has made me Top Reviewer since the day I joined a month ago.

With my warmest regards

James

[DIVYA]

Again, we could be twin souls separated at birth. Just because we love them insanely, we cannot believe that do not do the same. But at the same time, we realize this in the deep recesses of our subconscious.

But I am sorry you had to feel this way too. It's not a great place to be in.

Your words in this incredible poetry echo the thoughts swirling eternally in soul, my subconscious.

Just wonderful!

[Frieda P]

'Love insanely' you nailed it Divya...and yes, I'm sure of it. Thanks so much xo!

[Ohhhwillow]

This is stunning. And despite my young age a feeling I know all too well. You acknowledge that you have baggage, that you may drive away love with your fiery feelings and heart.. You do not trust your heart to be tame and so are reluctant to be absorbed by the possibility of a fairy tale future, perhaps from past experiences you are the wiser. You end in the word "ending" itself, significant in that you are without any hope. But Frieda - do not be afraid to live in more than the moment. It may seem safest, but it is a mechanism of fear you are far to strong to let overcome you, and you deserve to be loved honestly, openly, tenderly without feeling a constant pull against it. Finally, I love the way you flow from stanza 2 to 3, the rhyme is subtle and graceful. Sorry this was so lengthy, you hit an area I am too familiar with.. Very beautiful piece

[Frieda P]

You continuously amaze me with your insight dear Willow...your review and sweet words are much appreciated. Thanks for your kindness.

[Rita L. Sev]

This poem evokes frustration tinged with sorrow - A "why does it have to be this way"? Another vivid, thought-provoking write.

[Frieda P]

Exactly Rita, thanks so much...

[Dr. Wood ?]

in the wild..creatures burrow for warmth and security, surely...Or is that just my fluffy bunny mind on the go..Great poem as usual for you joisey gal....In all seriousness

[Frieda P]

Ha was wondering where you were going with 'bunnies'! Thanks doc.

[redflutterby]

While some peoples shadows are darker then others... does anyone really want to know our true selves. Some will claim they do...swear anything because they want you. But it is in the day to day struggle that the truth is shown. This poem makes me think about my father who is manic depressive and how hard it is to maintain contact with him. Even a ten minute phone call can be a grueling act. He is caught in the grip of his condition and i am fighting to not vent the anger I feel over dealing with it for all these years. It is a battle I can't win. Your prose is thought provoking and emotionally rending as always!!!

[Frieda P]

Good question Red, and the answer is probably not fully, like Jack said 'You can't handle the truth!'......Sorry this conjured up bad feelings for you. Thanks for the great review though.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Rabbits burrow, I never did. I am a loving and loyal partner. I seek not dominance nor submission I seek fulfilment and the honour of the breast. Lovely poem!

[Frieda P]

I take it you don't like 'burrowed'? I couldn't come up with a better word that fit...thanks John. Loving & loyal, where's the rest of your lot?!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Burrowed sounds like dominant insertion. The rest of me is in the fantasy of trust!

[Frieda P]

Ha 'dominant insertion' there's a write in there somewhere!! Any suggestions?

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Rape and neglect are bed fellows of abuse do not play mind games and do not be obtuse!

[Frieda P]

I meant suggestions for burrowed you pain in the arse, you said it!

[icelandicblue]

Life is filled with dead end roads. I like the contrast of night and day in this- the light of day can indeed be harsh. Nice poem Frieda.

[Frieda P]

Yes a well seasoned view of both is telling, thanks icelanicblue.

[Rhianne Ney]

This is a well penned poem and as always nice imagery and well expressed thoughts, I am speechless at the moment but I appreciate how great of a writer can write such things (:

[Frieda P]

Thanks Rhianne, always a awesome review from you, much appreciated.

[Rhianne Ney]

You're welcome, Ma'am. I don't see anything wrong with it so it's better to just say how great it was

[Monster ^.^]

Dark shadows within ourselves... not something we usually show but when pushed out, could a vivid pretense. Always remember that the stronger the light, the darker the shadows... ironic, isn't it? :)

[Frieda P]

The stronger the light, the more wrinkles you see, that's all I know! ha...thanks Monster. ;-)

[Monster ^.^]

:D Now, I'm learning.