Tethered Darkly

crush me with a morning sunsmile

tipsy on the perfume of mushroom wine

disrobe your heart to sophomoric cries

lessons learned from naked souls

convoluted with screams for clemency

softly sways the voice of discernment 

tethered to the teetered backlash,

pivoting on a quiver of echoed bumbles

of spasm'd arrows flung in poison offense

lip service on silver platters hold no purpose

rephrase the resplendence forgotten

sans promise, enchantment falls on fire

Reviews

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

I love the imagery and the wording here-- "tipsy on the perfume of mushroom wine" and "convoluted with screams for clemency". There is pleasure here, but also pain...and I get the sense that this is a bit of a love unrequited piece. Pleasure is not as beautiful "sans promise"; I enjoyed this feel. Well done, as always.

[Frieda P]

Thanks Friday, I always enjoy your reviews so much.

[Leigh]

A beautiful and enchanting piece

[InsanityWriter]

Amazing imagery. :) Superbly done!!

[quinfinn]

"sans promise, enchantment falls on fire" oh yeh, i know too well. so...are you in the business of slaying already broken hearts here, or is this a fantasy piece? somewhere in that beautiful, gifted, calculating mind of yours...there beats the heart of a true romantic, and she is screaming for release from that "dark tether"....oh, i get you....sometimes it is scary how much i get you. but then, you slay me with your poetry on a regular basis....i love your twisted heart...and your silver tongued mind.

[Frieda P]

You are a true romantic huckleberry....haha 'twisted heart & silver tongue', you say the nicest things!

[Baby Ricochet]

That's my girl

[Frieda P]

Thanks Mark.

[shallimarRose]

Wow, loving the metaphor and the couplets in this one .. "mushroom wine, teetered backlash, echoed bumbles, " Interesting piece and provoked thought and wonder.. thank you, shallimar (Rose)

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much shalimar, so happy you liked this one.

[DIVYA]

No fun without sincerity and the right deeds to prove it.
The message is awesomely done up in brilliant metaphors and stunning imagery.
Love perfume of mushroom wine.
As always, this was a unique poem to read.

[Frieda P]

Thanks Divya, always an interesting take from you, much appreciated.

[DIVYA]

:)

[Dream Weaver]

If this had gotten any deeper I would have fallen
into the abyss...Loved these lines:
"lessons learned from naked souls
convoluted with screams for clemency"...

[Frieda P]

Ha, thanks Joe, next time I'll provide a lifeline, we all one....

[Tai Ryens]

Such is why I so enjoy erotic poetry. I read this mostly with the thought of erotica in mind, and the disrobing of souls is quite intriguing that I'm surprised I have yet to hear of them until now. Well done, Frieda!

[Frieda P]

Always an intriguing response from you Tai, disrobing of the soul takes immense trust, thanks for your kind review.

[Pete Langley]

Your crocheting needle went mad on this one, love, but I think I worked it out. Having worked it out, I`ll keep my own counsel, letting the enchantment fall on the fire, then rise again like the phoenix. Superb crocheting, Frieda. P.

[Frieda P]

Ha purl 1 knit 1, wait that's not crocheting, I don't know much about either, thanks for the sweet review my friend. x

[jwesley]

Well, after 5 reads, my addled brain still doesn't know what it's telling me. Guess I'll have to sleep on it and maybe come back later.

j.

[Frieda P]

Don't feel bad j, I never know what it's telling me either, thanks.