In Silent Words

Collaboration with Jack, the Master of rhyme & romance. Thank you so much my dear friend, you raise me up. ♥

In Silent Words

 

I sat upon a cool zephyr waiting for my true love

seasons passed without a tug upon my heartstrings

winter took a fall, within summer's heated grip

spring’s poppies never sprouted their happy essence

 

Here within this day dream my heart it breathes the air

Finding but an empty scene within this prism’d view

Colors bathe my body as so I am much aware

Loneliness my constant friend now waiting here for you

 

i tried  to rise above the sun

the moon kept calling out my name in chant

only darkness danced in the pale of night

i lay my head upon the shoulder of surrender

 

Tears now form the mist a’ drench of all that I do see

Weeping fluent as the moon which falls on me this night

Star light open canopies of gemstones shining free

Blur beneath the vision as my heart does hold this sight

 

to find a sweetness in my own name

Of every season lone of dreaming

love shed a crimson tear in a whisper

In silent words which have no meaning

Reviews

[s y e]

Oh my, wow! This was so..... beautiful! There is so many beautiful, passionate lines in this write guys. For some bizarre reason while I was reading this, the song, You Raise Me Up was playing in my head, haha. I dunno why though.

"Star light open canopies of gemstones shining free
Blur beneath the vision as my heart does hold this sight"

The imagery in this piece was amazing, there was so much. It was a like story came alive on the screen. You guys really aced this piece. The collaboration was great!

Going in my favorites. 100/100

[Frieda P]

So jazzed you liked it farfalle, it's not hard to look good when Jack's got your back. I agree with the line you picked, of course it belongs to the master!

[s y e]

Oh yeah, featured review! Woohoo! :)

Haha, does it? Aaaaah, definitely the master then! :P

[Frieda P]

Oh Yay...and yes, the master! ;-)

[John Alexander McFadyen]

well answer because you are blonde!

[s y e]

I haven't a scooby what you mean John...

[beautiful dreamer]

it not the orignal scooooby its the fake inflatible scooooby! lol i'll explain myself in pm's

[Robbie~xoxo~]

Breathtaking!.... especially loved the last stanza...
Felt the melancholy tone of this write.... Great Collaboration!
I enjoyed reading the fusion of two very talented writers. ~xo~

[Frieda P]

You're too kind Robbie, the last stanza was both our voices, so thrilled you liked it. xo

[Robbie~xoxo~]

My pleasure....a beautiful Collab, Frieda. ~xo~

[redflutterby]

There's definitely a mixture of both of you in this. It swept through my mind bringing with it essence of lost love and painful longing. Fantastic piece. ;-D

[Frieda P]

Thanks Red, happy you enjoyed this one. :)

[KAOlmsted]

Holy cats...I got a two-fer! This is astoundingly beautiful. Jack looks good on you ;-) You wear him well, but you allowed just enough Frieda skin to show, making us all salivate a bit. That third stanza, just amazing. Well done, yous guys.

[Frieda P]

Ha I knew you'd be peeking at my skin! Doing the happy dance, Jack is incredible, so thrilled you liked it the kimmer ;-)

[KAOlmsted]

Well, we are hot tub buddies, after all xD

My pleasure, of course. I'd do something like this, but I don't play well with others ;-)

[Frieda P]

Ha, neither do I as a rule, but Jack lets you breathe the sweet air without pulling your pigtails or throwing sand in your face, twas fun!

[KAOlmsted]

;-) Nice...