In Silent Words

In Silent Words

A Poem by Frieda P
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Collaboration with Jack, the Master of rhyme & romance. Thank you so much my dear friend, you raise me up. ♥

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In Silent Words

 

I sat upon a cool zephyr waiting for my true love

seasons passed without a tug upon my heartstrings

winter took a fall, within summer's heated grip

spring’s poppies never sprouted their happy essence

 

Here within this day dream my heart it breathes the air

Finding but an empty scene within this prism’d view

Colors bathe my body as so I am much aware

Loneliness my constant friend now waiting here for you

 

i tried  to rise above the sun

the moon kept calling out my name in chant

only darkness danced in the pale of night

i lay my head upon the shoulder of surrender

 

Tears now form the mist a’ drench of all that I do see

Weeping fluent as the moon which falls on me this night

Star light open canopies of gemstones shining free

Blur beneath the vision as my heart does hold this sight

 

to find a sweetness in my own name

Of every season lone of dreaming

love shed a crimson tear in a whisper

In silent words which have no meaning

© 2013 Frieda P


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Oh my, wow! This was so..... beautiful! There is so many beautiful, passionate lines in this write guys. For some bizarre reason while I was reading this, the song, You Raise Me Up was playing in my head, haha. I dunno why though.

"Star light open canopies of gemstones shining free
Blur beneath the vision as my heart does hold this sight"

The imagery in this piece was amazing, there was so much. It was a like story came alive on the screen. You guys really aced this piece. The collaboration was great!

Going in my favorites. 100/100

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

John Alexander McFadyen

7 Years Ago

well answer because you are blonde!
s y e

7 Years Ago

I haven't a scooby what you mean John...
beautiful dreamer

7 Years Ago

it not the orignal scooooby its the fake inflatible scooooby! lol i'll explain myself in pm's



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A perfect union of beauty, serenity, imagery and emotion. I love the feeling that this one gave to me. A very powerful and emotional write that was also cool and sweetley serene at the same time. Well done.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

7 Years Ago

Love that you 'felt' it Friday, thanks, so happy that you enjoyed this one.
Jack...

7 Years Ago

Friday, so what do you think, didn't the two styles merge nicely? That's what happens when you have .. read more
Girl Friday (Sarah W.)

7 Years Ago

Yes, they merge quite nicely :)
okay, i see what all the hoopla is about. you two really did it. this is seamless and gorgeous. so ....which one wrote this poem, frack or jieda?

Posted 7 Years Ago


quinfinn

7 Years Ago

whatever
Frieda P

7 Years Ago

Did you just snap your fingers at me?
quinfinn

7 Years Ago

cheez doodles
Collaborations are fun aren't they? ;P Congrats to you both on a vibrant and imaginative piece...and of course, my heartstrings are always on call for a tug of seasonal imagery ;P

Posted 7 Years Ago


kublakhan27

7 Years Ago

Haha don't worry, you're still Mrs. R...she's much more fun that those old regal types, and I don't .. read more
Frieda P

7 Years Ago

Hide it in a hiding place, where no one ever goes, put it in your pantry with your cupcakes. ;-)
kublakhan27

7 Years Ago

;D
The descriptive nature of innocence in writing leaves the reader full of cleared resonance, a most stirring intrepid reliance on heavy overturned discription that I felt pulled into a fairytale, well done, good read.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Jack...

7 Years Ago

Thomas, we appreciate your kind words. This was a wonderul project to work on with my amazing friend.. read more
Thomas Fitzgerald

7 Years Ago

your most welcome.
Frieda P

7 Years Ago

Thanks so much Thomas, love where you went with this...
wow!!! this is so lovely:) your words have taken flight within my head:) such passion was put into this piece i can't even put into words how much this piece has stricken me!!:) absolutely amazing!!:)

Posted 7 Years Ago


Jack...

7 Years Ago

Thanks so much Marie. We are pleased you found this enjoyment in our piece. Frieda and I are very pr.. read more
Frieda P

7 Years Ago

Wow....amazing review, thanks marie!
marie

7 Years Ago

Thank you both!! This was great!!:)
beautiful, bittersweet and lonely poem. I thoroughly enjoy collaborative efforts as they bring out such different voices in both writers. Well done.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Jack...

7 Years Ago

Thanks so much. It was fun to write this with Frieda. I am one of her biggest fans and this was a dr.. read more
Frieda P

7 Years Ago

Thanks TL, glad you enjoyed this one, Jack is a word wizard.
Truely awesome the portrayal of a universe shorn of love. Two great poets have joined to create such a powerful lament, it touches the reader totally. Compliments, Frieda and Jack for this wonderful, soulful, skill full poetry,

Posted 7 Years Ago


Jack...

7 Years Ago

Divya, thank you for you sweet response to this poem. It was a complete thrill for me to write this .. read more
Frieda P

7 Years Ago

So thrilled you enjoyed Divya, it was Jack's idea and an honor to work with him, truthfully, I was .. read more
DIVYA

7 Years Ago

You are welcome Jack. You are welcome Frieda. You deserve such applause for this amazing collaborati.. read more
The longing and expectations for love are vividly painted in this piece. Very touching and poignant piece, Frieda.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Jack...

7 Years Ago

Gabrielle, always you sweet words are appreciated
Frieda P

7 Years Ago

Thanks gabrielle, we worked well as a team, glad you enjoyed it.
An intriguing mix of two poetic voices this collaboration is stellar and should be recorded with each poet reading their lines. I did this once with a poet and set some music behind it and it was a gem :)


Posted 7 Years Ago


Jack...

7 Years Ago

He was inviting you, Frieda.
J Todd Underhill

7 Years Ago

I am inviting you Frieda Jack assures me that you are a great poet, and I would be honored if you sh.. read more
Frieda P

7 Years Ago

You're too kind J Todd, don't think I'll be able to make it, but much appreciate it....

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If you want to know me, read my poetry, it's all in there. I am a mother of three sons (my finest moments) a sister, a survivor and a little bit crazy. I lost my beloved sister to suicide, so you'll.. more..

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