In Silent Words

In Silent Words

A Poem by Frieda P
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Collaboration with Jack, the Master of rhyme & romance. Thank you so much my dear friend, you raise me up. ♥

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In Silent Words

 

I sat upon a cool zephyr waiting for my true love

seasons passed without a tug upon my heartstrings

winter took a fall, within summer's heated grip

spring’s poppies never sprouted their happy essence

 

Here within this day dream my heart it breathes the air

Finding but an empty scene within this prism’d view

Colors bathe my body as so I am much aware

Loneliness my constant friend now waiting here for you

 

i tried  to rise above the sun

the moon kept calling out my name in chant

only darkness danced in the pale of night

i lay my head upon the shoulder of surrender

 

Tears now form the mist a’ drench of all that I do see

Weeping fluent as the moon which falls on me this night

Star light open canopies of gemstones shining free

Blur beneath the vision as my heart does hold this sight

 

to find a sweetness in my own name

Of every season lone of dreaming

love shed a crimson tear in a whisper

In silent words which have no meaning

© 2013 Frieda P


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Oh my, wow! This was so..... beautiful! There is so many beautiful, passionate lines in this write guys. For some bizarre reason while I was reading this, the song, You Raise Me Up was playing in my head, haha. I dunno why though.

"Star light open canopies of gemstones shining free
Blur beneath the vision as my heart does hold this sight"

The imagery in this piece was amazing, there was so much. It was a like story came alive on the screen. You guys really aced this piece. The collaboration was great!

Going in my favorites. 100/100

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

John Alexander McFadyen

7 Years Ago

well answer because you are blonde!
s y e

7 Years Ago

I haven't a scooby what you mean John...
beautiful dreamer

7 Years Ago

it not the orignal scooooby its the fake inflatible scooooby! lol i'll explain myself in pm's



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i tried to rise above the sun the moon kept calling out my name in chant.......gorgeous write Frieda.....may your words always flow as they do now.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Jack...

7 Years Ago

Dear Neva, thank you so much for your kind words. I feel very fortunate to have had the opportunity .. read more
Frieda P

7 Years Ago

Thanks Neva, I don't pay Jack enough for all the lovely comments he makes, so thrilled you enjoyed t.. read more
A troubadours lament in a court of romantic love.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Jack...

7 Years Ago

Thank you so much Ken for stopping by. It was my honor and priviledge to work on this beautiful poem.. read more
Ken Simm.

7 Years Ago

As it was an honour to read, Jack. You are more than welcome.
Frieda P

7 Years Ago

I paid him a lot of money to say that Ken, thanks so much for stopping in!
A medieval journey throughout the unknown world while time progresses without you? Brilliant. Oh, how I do enjoy the thought of swimming through the oceans you cried yourself, while the world twirls without a thought of you. Your protagonist made this said journey hard on him/herself (probably misread a line), and is aware of that. Regret plays a major role within this.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Jack...

7 Years Ago

Thank you so much Tai...it is definitely open for interpretation
Frieda P

7 Years Ago

Brilliant review, I like the thought too, thanks Tai, much appreciated.
Wow. Awesome. Great ending.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Jack...

7 Years Ago

Thank you so very much. Glad you liked it.
Frieda P

7 Years Ago

Thanks Junert, much appreciated, Jack put the ending together, melded our two voices together.
Junert

7 Years Ago

The power of two then. I really love this.
Wow, I really believe that collaboration is equal to BOOM! love the stunning word play, it is elegant. The words expressed brilliantly and flowing smooth in the space of love.

Congratulation to both of you for this lovely work.

My fave.

i tried to rise above the sun
the moon kept calling out my name in chant
only darkness danced in the pale of night
i lay my head upon the shoulder of surrender



Posted 7 Years Ago


Marc Marlon Villaflor

7 Years Ago

Cool Mr. Jack hoping more to come.
Frieda P

7 Years Ago

Ha BOOM is good, thanks so much Marc! :-)
Marc Marlon Villaflor

7 Years Ago

Welcome Frie :)
This was just so pretty to read.. The lines just seemed to mesh and I could not feel two different writers if I had not read the fore note..Wonderful job you too.. xo Rose

Posted 7 Years Ago


shallimarRose

7 Years Ago

And not one word to me from Jack about doing a collab with me..

Chicken?? lolol jus.. read more
Frieda P

7 Years Ago

Oh I'm sure he will, he was too busy being the jokester!
shallimarRose

7 Years Ago

LOL.......
Okay, my friends, I gotta say the poem made more sense to me as two poems. Maybe it didn't mesh as much as I needed it to mesh. I think stanzas two, four and five make a great poem and stanzas one, three and five make a great poem. Great imagery in all the lines!

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

7 Years Ago

Two & four are Jacks, the last one we melded the two together, we do have different styles I can see.. read more
This is the reason why we have collaborations... ;-)
Simple amazing!

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

7 Years Ago

Thanks Joe, so glad you liked it, I was so happy it turned out this well.
Dream Weaver

7 Years Ago

Don't mention it young lady.. ;)
There is so much I love about this collaboration that I scarcely know where to start. The mixing of the seasons in these lines, "
winter took a fall, within summer's heated grip
spring’s poppies never sprouted their happy essence" Such a delightful way with words! I found the idea of the, "I tried to rise above the sun the moon calling out my name in chant" spoke to me in a language I cannot describe. This piece moved me on a profoundly deep level. Exquisite!

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

7 Years Ago

You made my night, no, actually my week. :-)
Veronica Chandler

7 Years Ago

;-)
Jack...

7 Years Ago

Veronica, thank you so much for reading this fun project. Frieda is such an inspiration to me and it.. read more
Is she a fairy? That was all I could think of when I pictured her in my head. A tiny, helpless fairy with thin, papery wings that whipped in the wind. I think I'll be using the fairy thing to write a poem... thanks for the inspration! Great poem!

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

7 Years Ago

So glad to have inspired you Chloe...thanks for your lovely review.

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