Moon Struck

For the Crimson diavolo, you know who you are...let it be me.

Celestial skies were brilliantly bursting that night

       my eyes were open wide

             when I tripped into you

swiftly fell to the rhythm of your heat

          sweet was the fluid dance

                   of merging hearts

like moonbeams that pranced on twilight lit seas

         i believed in you  as the promised religion

    got lost in the nirvana of your touch

         i surrendered my soul in lush tones of oleander

luscious poison, so enthralling, it hurt so good

            this caged freedom of flight clipped

                                  my wayward gypsy wings

i wantonly entrusted them to your care

 you inspired me to captivate the moon

                              in reckless abandon

i wished upon an imploding stellar star 

          that this crash commune in divine reality

Author's Note

Reviews

[Avocations of Amber]

This is absolutely stunning, Frieda. I love the words you chose for this piece.....the images of white oleander, the gypsy wings, the stellar star......mesmerizing. This is perhaps my favorite yet. Such a vivid imagination you portray in your writings. I'm enthralled.

[Frieda P]

I'm enthralled by your review Amber, thanks so much, really appreciate it, love the oleander myself. :-)

[Avocations of Amber]

Just hurry up and write some more! haha.... :) can't wait to read them.....

[Deuces]

Wow, Frieda. Your knack for metaphor and imagery is second to none, period. You take your readers on a trip with each of your pieces.

"You inspired me to captivate the moon" - That is hot!

[Frieda P]

Thrilled you took that trip with me Cyn! Thanks so much...

[Rita L. Sev]

Frieda, you consistently bring such amazing images, and thoughts that I ponder for the rest of the day. "Like moonbeams that pranced on twilight lit seas, I believed in you as the promised religion, got lost in the nirvana of your touch..." Breathtaking use of language (Really - who can so effectively include, in one line, a simile, personification, AND metaphor, while maintaining fluidity? Only YOU, Frieda!) Whew! Terrific.

[Frieda P]

You just put a big cheesy smile on my face, not easy to do this early on a Saturday morning! Thanks so much Rita, much appreciate this review!

[Rita L. Sev]

You are most welcome!

[Frieda P]

Ha now you make me nervous, I don't want to flunk poetry class ;-P

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Not sure I can say more than has already been said. This Red Devil must be quite something so enjoy and what a write!

[Frieda P]

Grazie tanto Giovanni, means a lot coming from you...

[s y e]

Holy flip flops, wow, the imagery in this write is amazing, it is beautiful. I love how it feels like a movie playing on my screen as I read the sweet words you write, the romantic feeling you get from it. The way it flows, you've given it everything.

I loved the structure of this write, Frieda.... you always amaze me with each write, how my you put your heart and soul into it. With such dedication.

"Celestial skies were brilliantly bursting that night
my eyes were open wide
when I tripped into you"

The first stanza was my favorite. You started with an 'oomph' and ended with a 'bang!'

Music was fitting, I loved it. You always pick such wonderful music to go with amazing, devine writes like this one.

100/100

[Frieda P]

Wow, this review deserves a holy cats! Omg, noodle you humble me with your kind words kiddo...xo

[s y e]

Like I said, I was trying to give you a great one :-)

xoxo

[Frieda P]

I'd say I love you for it, but I already did before this, so I'll just say it was a fookin great one! ;-)

[s y e]

Yay! Go me, go me, go me xo

[Frieda P]

xD xo!xo

[s y e]

XOXO ♥♡♥♡

[beautiful dreamer]

you really don't EVER rhyme do you? this is beautiful without it though. this is so good free. so so good. you are amazing! and wowsers! just so you know i love it lol

[Frieda P]

Nope, hardly ever, unless I'm doing a fun piece, sounds so contrived to me when I do it, I have no clue how other's do it, Jack tried to explain the madness to his method, and I was like 'WHAT'? lol, thanks Jen!

[beautiful dreamer]

lol sometimes it just works sometimes not it weirdish

[beautiful dreamer]

i guess you're right its hard to rhyme and sound flowy and whimsical

[Frieda P]

It is for ME, other people don't seem to have a problem with it...

[beautiful dreamer]

i read through some of my most serious poems, they rhyme in a few spots but not the whole thing

[Coyote Poetry]

Beautiful poetry and music.
"this caged freedom of flight clipped
my wayward gypsy wings
i wantonly entrusted them to your care"
Thank you for the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[Frieda P]

Thanks John, always enjoy your visit.

[Sami Khalil]

" you inspired me to captivate the moon

in reckless abandon

i wished upon an imploding stellar star

that this crash commune in divine reality"
A very reflective poem full of soothing emtions of awakening after the Moon struck promises and where you are learning to fly with broken wings that you entrusted him with and where he clipped them...A felt sadness in this beautiful poem and the lost precious times in life...
Kudos as always...:)

[Frieda P]

Awakening, perhaps...thanks Sami, always love it when you read me. ;-)

[Sami Khalil]

Hahaha...You are wide open ...lol in all awakenings ;)
You arewelcome...:)

[Emerald Seas]

This one hits the heart well, my friend. Your voice is unique and expressed with skill!
"this caged freedom of flight clipped
my wayward gypsy wings
i wantonly entrusted them to your care"

Such trust... it is wondrous, and then again it can also backfire into holy hell! Lovely writing though - as usual!

[Frieda P]

Ha, don't we know it! So happy you enjoyed this one, have a great weekend Sera.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

A crafted piece that seems to have been very heart felt, well done, good read.

[Frieda P]

Much appreciated Thomas.

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

Frieda, you are one of a kind........such a beautiful write.

[Frieda P]

Always delighted by your visit Neva, thanks so much.