B'mused

I want you so badly, I can taste you~

   touch me tender in the middle of the night

     dance with me through my daze of hazes

        send me love notes of rapturous flair

                     wash over me, set me a' fire

 I can hardly exist without you

     let me drink you in, wash over me

focus my dreams, be my jungle  fever

     my sweetest of untamed wildflowers

You make my world tumultuously roar

    raise me to fiercer exhilarating heights,

       when you divert your vision unto me

   let me unfold the mystery of my secret lover

Lovely words echo whispers on a zephyr

     breathe your majestic life into mine

   I beg of thee my love, please 

          crash into me, crush me,  b'muse me

Reviews

[ms. barrie]

wow, talk about intoxicating, sensuous, this is gorgeous, Frieda! This is so romantically lyrical, incredible imagery with amazing fluidity. love, love your choice of words and how they fall into each line on each of the stanzas, this is so dreamy, yet full of raw desire . s**t, i need some chocolate now. thanks for sharing, brilliantly penned. fav'd - 100 to 100

[Frieda P]

You are much too kind Barrie, thanks so much for this amazing review, you've made my day!

[ms. barrie]

you're very welcome Frieda i will save this on the WORD/reg pc my word on notebook didn't install correctly due to my impatience. glad to have made someone's day :) - take care!

[Frieda P]

You're too good to me Barrie, muchly flattered! ;-)

[ms. barrie]

likewise Frieda :) -- it's a beautiful poem...just being honest :) - happy weekend!

[Annabelle Lee]

**Blushes** What a, ahem, entertaining write, Miss Frieda

[Tai Ryens]

Vivid, addicting portrayal of the urge to consume another love. How ironic, that I am intrigued by a moment you yourself fail to understand as you attempt to `` unfold the mystery `` of your lover. Well done!!

[Rhianne Ney]

Nice and greatly written, Madam

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

And you're BACK! :) I always love your sensual, bordering on the naughty stuff, because it is so beautifully and honestly wrought. I like the idea here; it reminds me of the days when romantic love was actually something that truly existed and both sexes knew their roles in it. The whole courtship thing...I love the idea of letters. Well done write, my friend!

[Kristin Lee]

Talk about sexy! I love the sweet indications that linger in each word. This is the kind of love poem that should be touted in the winds. A heady mixture of lust and love ripe with suggestion. Great, great write up!!!

[Allen Smuckler]

This is beautifully and honestly written Frieda. wonderful imagery and metaphors throughout, with a great flow to it. I recently posted "take Me In" which is similar in message but different in tone, I think.......You may want to check it out...
As writers we re given the "poetic license" to do and say whatever we want in whatever manner we chose but, if not a critique, I do have an observation or 2 to make...
I don't have a problem with "thee" but since the entire write uses the more conventional "you" or "your", the classical use of "thee" seems a little out of place here. Also, though b'muse can work ( ' substituting 'e'), a'fire looks wrong since the apostrophe doesn't really take the place of anything....Anyway, minor points, just thought I'd bring them to your attention. Obviously, your poem... your choice.
As I've said....a terrific write from beginning to end.
allen

[Sundown]

Nice expressive tone

[rhythm&blues]

Wow, I think I am actually blushing!

[Tarry Franck]

I couldn't put it any better than Barrie.Joy - thank you for this intoxicating piece
crash into me, crush me, b'muse me - Just love it

[pandorascollar]

This poem is amazing! So well put together! So romantic