~The Taste of Death...

questionable mysteries of death

What does death taste like, 

          is it bittersweet or acerbic

does the scent jolt one

                   to senseless abandon

is the feel of floating

                on zephyr's eternally blissful

what does one see

           when faced with death's eyes

do angels beckon us

                   to join the alluring alliance of souls

a clarion sound of heaven's harmony

                             to peaceful sleep

or will the devil come a knockin' 

                           with hell's bells last call

perhaps we merely become infinitesimal flecks

               endlessly ephemeral,         flitting 

                              within pure grandness of the megacosm

Reviews

[Ravyne Hawke]

This is such a beautifully constructed poem. Love the flow. You present your readers with some searching questions. I used to wrestle with these questions all the time.. so often I would drive myself insane from it. I finally resolved that death was a natural cycle of rebirth, and left it at that. Great job!

[Frieda P]

Thanks Lori, somehow I missed your lovely review here.

[Ravyne Hawke]

no worries, Frieda.. I think I miss some from time to time too =)

[PandaPeaceful]

Truly beautiful work. The flow, your vocabulary, the structure. Good job.

[Alfred Kukitz]

With this poem I do pledge to coming looking for you when death makes my bed.

Regards,
Al

[lee von cleef]

find me......................

[InsanityWriter]

Amazing, rhythmic, and flowing. Excellent piece. (:

[Frieda P]

Grazie mille :-)

[Zahra]

Death is a really intriguing topic, because it is the other side of life, you won't want me started about death because I'm a student of mysticism. A truly thought provoking and beautifully done poem. Well done.

[Frieda P]

Thanks Zahra, I guess that'd be a whole other poem there.

[Tai Ryens]

I find my belief to how death feels is exactly how we felt before we were born of the womb. Do you not remember it? Exactly.
Enticing, morbid, and just at the brink of the concepts I so lovingly enjoy.

[Frieda P]

No, I don't, and I'm always amazed by people that do....

[Khaled A Khunaifer]

nice poem

[Frieda P]

Thanks for the visit and review Khaled.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

The guarded elegance within the wording lends to mask the punch one feels while reading this piece, well done, good read.

[Frieda P]

Hmm, 'guarded elegance' I like that one Thomas, thank you kindly.

[Trigorin]

Not bad. Good use of imagery, and I think you've managed to handle your topic fairly well. I think there's room to expand, as the ending doesn't really feel very final or fitting, really. I think that you could have branched out a little and tried not to cram so much imagery into the limited space of the piece, but it's still very readable. Good work.

[Frieda P]

Now I feel legit, I got a 'not bad' from you Trigorin...glad you liked it, not sure what you mean by the ending not feeling final, where could you take it after the megacosm? Thanks for your visit and review.