~Enchanted Moon Trance

~Enchanted Moon Trance

A Poem by Frieda P

       Enchanted by a moon trance 
in your eyes
    starry stratospheres 
          take on sparkling hues
       wafting violaceous diamonds
                    of lapis lazuli
         streaming beautiful music
             in its radiance
cello's playing whimsy 
                 with a prolific message
          strumming across my heart stings
striking old love chords
                     tuning harmonious notes
      beating in my chest 
                  a bumble of flutterbys
              wonder if these butterflies
                                  could be true
                  you make my soul tremble and sigh,
                 would you leave me bluer 
                              than the azure skies

© 2013 Frieda P


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Frieda P

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Like Noodlehead I am a sucka for moon and stars pieces. I also would have came here anyway because I thought I saw Raquel minus the fur in the poem photo... ;)
I love how the subject is so enchanted that they are ready to fall in love yet at the back of their mind (and the end of the poem) theres that niggling doubt -
"would you leave me bluer
than the azure skies"
I also liked the use of the cello device because it has to be the most sexual of the orchestra's instruments which adds to the eroticism.
Very hott Frieda P - nice poem too - oh Im sorry, I'll behave...
X

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

9 Years Ago

Nope, no one could ever replace those guys....!
ANTO

9 Years Ago

Goodnight Frieda P Longstocking
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Frieda P

9 Years Ago

Ha another new name, sweet dreams! x



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" strumming across my heart stings
striking old love chords
tuning harmonious notes
beating in my chest "

D'awww I loved this! The music was perfect for the write and the write was amazing, you know I love the moon and stars so just the title dragged me in but this was out standing!

You have so many powerful lines and your imagery is amazing!

Posted 8 Years Ago


i love it , fabulously done.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Like Noodlehead I am a sucka for moon and stars pieces. I also would have came here anyway because I thought I saw Raquel minus the fur in the poem photo... ;)
I love how the subject is so enchanted that they are ready to fall in love yet at the back of their mind (and the end of the poem) theres that niggling doubt -
"would you leave me bluer
than the azure skies"
I also liked the use of the cello device because it has to be the most sexual of the orchestra's instruments which adds to the eroticism.
Very hott Frieda P - nice poem too - oh Im sorry, I'll behave...
X

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

9 Years Ago

Nope, no one could ever replace those guys....!
ANTO

9 Years Ago

Goodnight Frieda P Longstocking
X
Frieda P

9 Years Ago

Ha another new name, sweet dreams! x
Enchanting- love, trance and the moon. The moon goddess would be honored.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

9 Years Ago

Thanks Lady Veleda, so glad you enjoyed this one.
I live in that trance.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

9 Years Ago

Lucky you...
starry stratospheres
take on sparkling hues

starry stratospheres....love that!

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

9 Years Ago

Thanks TL, glad you enjoyed it.
"cello's playing whimsy
with a prolific message
strumming across my heart stings
stiking old love chords"

Simply beautiful. I love the moon and I love music. This was the perfect fit, Frieda. I'm enchanted:)

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Rebecca Buller

9 Years Ago

You're welcome, and 2 Cellos is awesome:-)
Frieda P

9 Years Ago

We should be so lucky in our craft, they went from playing on the streets to viral on youtube, overn.. read more
Rebecca Buller

9 Years Ago

LOL!! Behold the power of Youtube:-)
A beautiful and effective piece from a gifted poet. :) Really nice, Frieda. Loved it.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

9 Years Ago

Thanks so much, humbled by your words. :-)
Zahra

9 Years Ago

My Pleasure! :)
This is real reciprocal poetry, Frieda. I loved both pieces, music and poetry....and the pizzicato in both the cello and your `heart stings`. Excellent work, honey. P.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

9 Years Ago

Thanks Pete, means a lot to me, and I love that word 'pizzicato', thrilled!

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