~Enchanted Moon Trance

       Enchanted by a moon trance 

in your eyes

    starry stratospheres 

          take on sparkling hues

       wafting violaceous diamonds

                    of lapis lazuli

         streaming beautiful music

             in its radiance

cello's playing whimsy 

                 with a prolific message

          strumming across my heart stings

striking old love chords

                     tuning harmonious notes

      beating in my chest 

                  a bumble of flutterbys

              wonder if these butterflies

                                  could be true

                  you make my soul tremble and sigh,

                 would you leave me bluer 

                              than the azure skies

Author's Note

Reviews

[ANTO]

Like Noodlehead I am a sucka for moon and stars pieces. I also would have came here anyway because I thought I saw Raquel minus the fur in the poem photo... ;)
I love how the subject is so enchanted that they are ready to fall in love yet at the back of their mind (and the end of the poem) theres that niggling doubt -
"would you leave me bluer
than the azure skies"
I also liked the use of the cello device because it has to be the most sexual of the orchestra's instruments which adds to the eroticism.
Very hott Frieda P - nice poem too - oh Im sorry, I'll behave...
X

[Frieda P]

Never behave on my account, and pssh Raquel, I used my own pic Lol...thanks Antnee, so jazzed you liked this one, and I love 2 Cellos, yes they do have a way of making it sound more erotic....

[ANTO]

I knew it was your pic all along Frieda. Re the cello link with eroticism - Im pretty sure it must be because of their shape - they're like the way the Rat Pack would have described a 'dame' with the hands drawing the hour-glass shape and with the wolf whistle accompaniment. Phewiit Pheww { }

[Frieda P]

Hahaha you're a riot Antnee! I happen to love that Rat Pack, and dame was so perfect, sure do miss Frankie....my best friend's father used to listen to him all the time and whenever I went there we were inundated with him, thought he was corny at the time as we were Beatles, Stones fan, but now I see the fascination.

[ANTO]

B'Jaysus Frieda yes.. those guys had style in buckets. No one can touch them these days. IMHO(tep)read moreB'Jaysus Frieda yes.. those guys had style in buckets. No one can touch them these days. IMHO(tep)
Jeez - I have to lay of the coffee or you have to get a new profile pick coz I could have swore that your image just waved at me lolol
X

[Frieda P]

Nope, no one could ever replace those guys....!

[ANTO]

Goodnight Frieda P Longstocking
X

[Frieda P]

Ha another new name, sweet dreams! x

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

That intense aroma of passion with music and words always makes ones thighs tighten and breath lost - a fantastic piece my darling girl!

[Frieda P]

Ha what a visual sir!

[Rita L. Sev]

Would you leave me bluer than azure skies - such a deep and beautiful way to protect your heart with words... eyes with ... sparkling hues ... of lapis lazuli... *sigh*. Beautifully crafted, Frieda.

[Frieda P]

I swear I responded to this, must have been in my sleep, thanks so much Rita, love lapis lazuli....

[Rita L. Sev]

Me, too. I have a beautiful chunk of it in a ring that belonged to a great-aunt. I feel like royalty when I wear it...

[kublakhan27]

A marvelous night for a moon trance? ;) I love it when you talk about music...

[Frieda P]

Exactly...next in line to Cohen, ha, thanks Steve.

[kublakhan27]

My pleasure :)

[icelandicblue]

Sigh, bluer than the azure skies. I love the stone the color and how the words lapis lazuli roll off your tongue. Another stunning poetic stringed serenade from you.

[Frieda P]

Thanks blue, I always did love lapis lazuli...much appreciate your glowing review.

[Jack...]

Frieda I am sitting pool side in Key Westright now but nothing before my eyes is more beautiful to me than your poetry. You are a truly talented poet and I consider it an honor in my life to be allowed the oportunity to know you and read you. You are truly someone special.

[Frieda P]

Jack you tickled me with review, too kind, you're a dear friend, enjoy your holiday!

[Rocans]

Wow, I was drawn in by the title and awed by the content. I have to say though, this poem reminds me a lot about one that I myself had written some time ago and have yet to place here on this site. The musical analogies were apt and masterfully incorporated into this piece, giving it a unique descriptive voice. Good work! :)

[Frieda P]

Thanks for your lovely review Rocans, let me know when you publish yours. :-)

[Rocans]

You are welcome Frieda, actually as it stands most of my poems have some kind of music analogies. I just think music goes well with poetry. But I will let you know when I post that one in particular. :)

[redflutterby]

"Would you leave me bluer then the azure skies?"

That's the question we wonder as we are swept up by the music of attraction. It feels so good..that dance of emotion but the slight doubt lingers in our minds. We hope the answer is no...that the beautiful symphony will play in our hearts and minds always. So magical the pictures you paint with your words...xo

[Frieda P]

Dear Red, your review is like poetry, thanks so much my kind friend for your insightful thoughts. x

[redflutterby]

;-)xo

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i thought of that too, like Mark did..."i'm being followed by a moon shadow"

i hope this person won't leave the speaker bluer than the skies.

really lovely wording here.

[Frieda P]

I love that song, but never thought of it, glad it brought you there, thanks jacob.

[Quill~]

First of all, love the blue!...and your words melt into a mesmerizing lullaby.
I enjoyed the wistful emotion of being entranced by the moon. Engaging write!

[Frieda P]

Thanks Quill, oh I love that 'mesmerizing lullaby'...much appreciated!

[Quill~]

:) my pleasure.

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

There is something about "string music" that always conjours the feeling of romantic love, at least for me. I like the image of the Cello and the way that it was used in your context.

There is often so much beauty in love that we fail to see the "ugly" possibilities, but you have eluded to the possible pain in the last lines with "would you leave me bluer/than the azure skies"--it is an apt question, as well as a risk that we all seem to take.

Well written, my friend.

[Frieda P]

Laughing here, I assume you're a life long member of the I Never Learn Club also, thanks Friday!

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

Of course...I NEVER learn...haha