Mankind's Desert

Stars started bouncing from the skies

light fractured the universe

sunshine toned down its hue

man in the moon hummed  a dark tune

grassy knolls turned to desert wastelands

the day mankind relinquished peace....

Reviews

[Jack...]

Let's hope this never happens. Very cool Frieda and a bit different for you, but I like it. This plays right along with Un-Versed Life. What happens in the future no one knows, but I can only hope it continues to bring your beautiful poetry to me. Life without music, poetry or now peace, as your wonderful poem states, I will not think of any of that.

Your are talent personified, your mind never stops, your beauty finds us in your words for your poetry is beyond amazing.

[Frieda P]

As always you're way too kind my friend, wanted to try something different, a topic that weighs heavily in the back of our minds I guess....thanks muchly Jack!

[Leslie Philibert]

a very noble pladoyer against war, fine job

[Rita L. Sev]

Heavy and ominous, this piece gives fodder for thought... so that our mantra must now be "I will not relinquish peace..." Excellent, Frieda.

[lee von cleef]

Grassy Knolls , I wonder if the weight is only in my head.

[Frieda P]

I'm pretty sure it's all in your head hon....

[Dr. Wood ?]

oh how serious......................brilliantly constructed, as usual...

[Frieda P]

I can be serious on occasion doc....

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

That's the truth, Frieda. We will reap what we sow.
If man will continuously become a senseless caretaker of his world, he will soon see his own created desert.
Sort of a warning to mankind. Nice concept.

[Frieda P]

I think many of us have this fear, yet it continues, thanks for your thoughts here Dhaye.

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

You're welcome, Frieda. :)

[Frieda P]

Enjoy your weekend Dhaye. :-)

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Thank you, Frieda. Enjoy your weekend, too. God bless!

[Sami Khalil]

This scenario ( s ) haunts the future of mankind if they do not abolish all chemical , biological and nuclear weapons. Some leader will use them some day for it is a matter of time. A very good write to raise awareness...Bravo

[Frieda P]

Hear hear Sami, if only people would wake up to the reality of it all....thank you.

[Sami Khalil]

You are so right. I think man is his own predator...:)

[John Stussy]

A grim but pretty accurate picture of a very real possibility of our future, and I honestly have become enough of a pessimist that I say f**k it, mankind deserves it. You used awesome imagery with this piece that made it hit home all the stronger. Awesome poem Frieda.

[Frieda P]

Very frightening thought John, thanks muchly for your thoughts this morning, enjoy your weekend!

[Coyote Poetry]

I hope the artwork is wrong. The scary part is. Being a Soldier for 15 years taught me. People won't fear war till it destroyed a major city and murdered a million people. I pray we don't use bio, nuclear or chemical. Chemical is used today. Agent orange was a form of chemical welfare and today. Chemical welfare is being used today in many places. A powerful poem with a needed message. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Frieda P]

Sad and true John, thanks so much for your thoughts here....

[Firestone Feinberg]

Six short lines and you said Everything. This is a spectacular poem. And you are a spectacular person. Love, David

[Frieda P]

First review I read with my cuppa this AM and you've made me smile, no easy feat this early in the morn, thanks so much my sweet friend! x

[Firestone Feinberg]

But will there still be coffee? Will it taste like mud... you must know that old joke if not i'll tell you x

[Frieda P]

There's always coffee! Don't think I know that one though...

[Firestone Feinberg]

Then youre not old enough. Its about a converaotion betweem a customer in a diner and the waiter...


Customer: WAITER! THIS COFFEE TASTES LIKE MUD!

Waiter: It was ground this morning.

[Frieda P]

Nope, never heard that corny one Lol...but thanks for the chuckles. No mud here by the way, cheers!

[Brandon]

Perfectly you captured mankind's demise. It takes few words to speak the truth. Excellent read and write.

[Frieda P]

Thanks for your visit & review GW, muchly appreciated.

[Brandon]

You're welcome.