Sea E'scape

Sea E'scape

A Poem by Frieda P

I lie still in the midnight surf
crashing waves rushing over me
pummeling an already broken soul
ravaging my cold chamber'd heart
torn apart by thunderous clouds,
that day you sail'd for better horizons

Sinking breathlessly onto the edge,
hoping for ocean's depth to unfurl
this magnitude of boundless space
left behind in your parting tides,
sand engulfs my weeping eyes
etching how blind'd love can be


Hauntingly sad violin cries in the distance, 
strumming the siren call on wing'd strings
whilst ebb'd flow of tears immerse,
drowning ceaselessly in streams...


© 2014 Frieda P


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Frieda P


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I like where this is coming from right from the first line. I am a water baby, so midnight surf is my kind of place to be...The term "cold-chambered heart" is great! This reminds me of a time when I tossed off my clothes in the winter on Ocean Beach in San Francisco in front of all my friends who I used to go to the beach and play guitar with and I ran out into the water in the middle of the night because I felt, like you are describing, I was broken and lonely!! I had had a terrible break up. "This magnitude of boundless space" really gets to the heart of it! I like that this is not an overtly negative piece. The title "E'scape" says that there is a "seascape of hope" here. It is less "sad" than melancholy. It is less "tragic" than mournful. I always love that you have an overall conception that works! I am always saddened when people write one dimensional poetry. This clearly has a number of levels of interpretation and plot. That is always a pleasure in your writing!! There is the superficial but also the profound, and everything in-between.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

7 Years Ago

Wow Robby, you've left me speechless, I'm so thrilled you felt this one...I'm truly humbled by your .. read more
Robert Tusitala O'Neill

7 Years Ago

Well, clearly I get where you are coming from...It was an interesting night at the beach. When I ca.. read more
Frieda P

7 Years Ago

That is a brutal story, so the sea was cleansing to your spirit, I get that...and I'm sure they tho.. read more



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I love your wording! It is so elegant and makes your writing unique.
This piece was beautifully written and I'm glad I got a chance to read some of your work. :)

~Stefanie

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

7 Years Ago

Thanks for such a warm review Stephanie, muchly appreciated. :)
That's so romantic !! I'm not kidding, after such a poem I would dare to say you belong to the Romantic poetic movement, obviously post-literam, but that poem has nothing to envy to a Colleridge's or a Lamartine's one. Wonderful job !

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

7 Years Ago

Wow, you just blew me away Le parisien, thanks so much, that made my day for sure!
外人 (Gaijin)

7 Years Ago

For just saying the truth? :) you deserved it, my friend !
Frieda P

7 Years Ago

Awh you're very kind, thanks again! :-)
your poem, the music and the art all work my heart to silence and deep melancholy ... i listened to the whole song and read "Sea E'scape" twice .... your imagery is very powerful to me... great stuff!
E.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

7 Years Ago

Why thank you so much E, muchly appreciate your kindness my friend.
Beautiful artwork and music. The sea is my favorite place. Good to be near the sing and listen to her music. No weakness in the excellent poetry.
Coyote

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

7 Years Ago

Grazie mille Coyote.
I really love the way you incorporated such a sadness with the ocean. It was quite unusual and a perfect fit. The last verse couldn't have been written with more perfection if you worked on it for an eternity. Your poetry is beauty in itself.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

7 Years Ago

Thanks so much Sue.
I wish to join you in the surf, a most descriptive piece my darling x

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

7 Years Ago

Thanks Thomas.
You've graciously twisted the common concept of "missing your homelands" by utilizing anthropomorphism in the way you describe the earth's relationship with the sea. You long for the previous occupant that's lived atop you, whom I truly believe has tended to the lands well until one day, for inexplicable reasons, sailing away. Well done, the illustrations here were grand.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

7 Years Ago

And I truly appreciate your gracious review Tai, thank you so much my friend...
WOW!! This one is excellent. I read it three times and everything! Outstanding work Frieda. The poem, the music, the whole thing. Simply outstanding.

Posted 7 Years Ago


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Frieda P

7 Years Ago

You nearly knocked me off my feet Baby, that's the lengthiest review I ever got from you!! Thanks, .. read more
Baby Ricochet

7 Years Ago

Oh I did...........
Frieda P

7 Years Ago

I'm saving this one....thanks again.
excellent writing, the poem leads the readers through the rhythmic waves along with the music

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

7 Years Ago

Thanks for the lovely review sayed...
SAYED THANGAL

7 Years Ago

ok madam, pleasure
I like where this is coming from right from the first line. I am a water baby, so midnight surf is my kind of place to be...The term "cold-chambered heart" is great! This reminds me of a time when I tossed off my clothes in the winter on Ocean Beach in San Francisco in front of all my friends who I used to go to the beach and play guitar with and I ran out into the water in the middle of the night because I felt, like you are describing, I was broken and lonely!! I had had a terrible break up. "This magnitude of boundless space" really gets to the heart of it! I like that this is not an overtly negative piece. The title "E'scape" says that there is a "seascape of hope" here. It is less "sad" than melancholy. It is less "tragic" than mournful. I always love that you have an overall conception that works! I am always saddened when people write one dimensional poetry. This clearly has a number of levels of interpretation and plot. That is always a pleasure in your writing!! There is the superficial but also the profound, and everything in-between.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

7 Years Ago

Wow Robby, you've left me speechless, I'm so thrilled you felt this one...I'm truly humbled by your .. read more
Robert Tusitala O'Neill

7 Years Ago

Well, clearly I get where you are coming from...It was an interesting night at the beach. When I ca.. read more
Frieda P

7 Years Ago

That is a brutal story, so the sea was cleansing to your spirit, I get that...and I'm sure they tho.. read more

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